There were some typos in this fic, and it wasn't clear to me whether they were intentional or not. On the one hand, this IS a younger character, and realistically, kids these days don't worry about spelling much.
On the other hand, they could just be the usual 1 am in the morning typos that all of us get now and then.
Those are minor points. It think the core of the story was really nice and effective. The serious turn the story took was unexpected, but really lifted the story out of the run of the mill, average story and made it into something else.
The earlier parts were realistic depictions of the lane family dynamics, as well as the pettiness of children (and often adults). It's nice to know that not every child of Lois and Clark is a carbon copy of their father.
Kids are petty. Learning not to be is part of growing up. That's what this story is all about- the loss of innocence, and the coming of knowledge.
Nice work.
