Ralph is a dork. And that's not a compliment.
This mash-up wasn't all Clark's fault, although he could have (and should have) declined Lois' passionate invitation to share herself with him. He should have turned it into an opportunity to tell her The Secret. That way she would have been angry about his hiding something so important from her, but he wouldn't have bedded her without her knowing.
But Lois should have taken the time to understand how hard it is for Clark to share that part of himself with anyone, even with the woman he loves. She should have been willing to listen to his explanation before shutting him out of her life. Her fire and passion so often conspire with Clark's reticence to make The Revelation a wrenching experience for all concerned.
Overall, this was a great story. You captured Lois' headstrong disregard for her own safety and her passion for both the truth and for Clark. You portrayed Clark's dilemma and his difficulty in choosing a course of action very clearly. Most of all, you brought Lucy Lane to life and made her more than a plot point or a cardboard character. She was alive, vibrant, and plotting in the best tradition of the Lane sisters, even if her best-laid plans almost blew up in her face. And her self-deprecating humor? Wonderful!
Suddenly she laughed. “Hey, maybe it’s me. Even Clark Kent cheated on me!”
And even though Lois hasn't figured out how she wants this to play out, she has decided that she wants Clark in her life. That's very good. And he's decided to play it straight with her. That's also very good. Lucy knows The Secret and isn't swept away by it? That's interesting. Maybe it means that she's matured quite a bit in the last few months.
Great ride, Alicia. I enjoyed it. I hope to see more offerings from you very soon.
