This was a fun chapter for me, but quite trying. I wanted to have Lois be in shock but not angry with Clark. However, I figured that Clark would be afraid that Lois was angry and figured he’d interpret her shock for anger and possibly even some level of rejection.
My first attempt at that came out all backwards. I had Lois really rejecting him and he was just confused and hurt. HappyGirl held up a big ‘Stop’ sign and basically told me to think about what they were doing. After a rewrite of that scene, I believe I got much closer to what I wanted with the version that everyone saw here.
Thank you all for the feedback.
Bob
