Welcome to the boards, Deja Vu!
That's a good fic you are posting for us! It's very well-written, and the fact that you know how many parts there will be obviously means that you have already finished it!
A very fascinating aspect of your fic is that Clark appears to be powerless here. Or maybe not. This was ambiguous:
It was time to spread my wings and fly.
I immediately winced and amended mentally, Well, stretch my legs and run, at least.
Could it be that Clark wants to fly, but for some reason he has decided that he isn't going to do it, so that he won't draw attention to himself? No, really, he seems to be powerless.
My hand moved to the small lump in my shirt that was my locket, and my fingers traced its outline. If I ran into any madmen or muggers—well, it would be bad for me. I needed to be careful and stay out of trouble.
This doesn't sound like an invulnerable person reflecting on his own situation. And what is that locket he is talking about? What's in it?
All in all, this is an original and fascinating setup. But I need to give you a word of warning about myself. Not only am I talkative, but I am a diehard Lois fan and a ferocious Lois defender as well. If I think that your fic treats Lois badly, then I'm afraid I'm not going to like it, whatever other qualities is has. On the other hand, you should remember that most people here are at least as interested in and fond of Clark as they are of Lois, so I'm not at all representative of the general views of this fandom. Nevertheless, I thought I might as well tell you about myself.
Another thing I don't like much about LnC fics is villain-heavy A-plots, and something tells me that the person Clark has saved is Lex Luthor. Gaaaah! That almost guarantees that Luthor is going to play a major role here. So I may keep commenting or I might not, but even so, welcome to the boards, Deja Vu!
Ann
