Well done! Can't wait to see how you handle the rest. I particularly loved this:
He reached out to cup her face; it was their touch. One they had shared so many times, both with him as Superman and as Clark. She looked up at him in surprise. <<He *had* tried to tell me. He just could never find the words...>>
Was that in the original script? Very interesting.
Really enjoying your story and that episode's plot actually works better for me with your changes and additions!
