I agree, no tomatoes necessary! Really nicely done, especially the revelation. Very well handled.
“Aren’t you going to ask me what the LL stands for?” I asked him, wanting to get this over with. I was sure he was dying with curiosity.
But Jimmy just looked at me in confusion for a moment. “It’s not ‘Lois Lane’?” he asked.
I flushed. Lois Lane. How had I not thought of that? Before-Lois would have. Or well, before-Lois should have. Because she hadn’t. Maybe before-Lois wasn’t so great. If she had been, I wouldn’t be in this position, right?
Ok, I get where you are coming from, but I am pretty sure Lois would have been a bit quicker to realize LL can also stand for Lois Lane.
Just sayin'... But maybe what you're trying to point out is she was so wrapped up in transforming if you will, into Lois Luthor, that she doesn't see the forest for the trees, so to speak?
Cause I DO like the before/after-Lois. That is a really interesting take. Cause you're right... she does change, ever so slightly. And somewhat ironically, it's the change that eventually opens her up to Clark. But still... maybe this bit needs just a tweak. I still think she wouldn't need Jimmy to point out Lois Lane in LL...
Except I didn’t have a choice. Some bizarre law in Metropolis – once you received your vanity plates, you needed to surrender your original plates. I had tried to convince the DMV that I didn’t even want the vanity plates, but they wouldn’t take them back.
I had to laugh a little at this. I had vanity plates 'Opera Em' that I wanted to keep, and the DMV refused! I had sold my car and they wouldn't let me keep my old plates (no new car to put them on either). I feel your pain at the DMV, Lois!
“I needed to. I can’t… Lois, I can’t do this anymore. I want to be there for you. To be your friend. I can’t… if you need me to stay away I can, but…”
“But what?” I asked, confused by the look in his eyes.
“I can’t stay in Metropolis. I can’t… I can’t see you everyday and barely speak to you. I just can’t,” he said now.
Aw, poor Clark. This broke my heart just a little...
Can we start right here? We’re best friends and partners and you happen to have another job saving the world?”
Loved this line!
Anyway, glad you're writing again! Want to see more!!
