Very interesting start. I actually wish that you hadn't said that it wasn't a deathfic, because with the assumption planted in my head that Lois (somehow) isn't dead, I find myself in a position where I don't so much *care* about what's happening, but I am curious to discover what happens to Clark and how you're bringing Lois back to life. I think I would be much more emotionally involved in the story if you had let me think that Lois was killed, and then happily surprised when you reveal how this isn't a deathfic. Now I'm just trying to work out *how* this isn't a deathfic!
Still, good start. I'm a sucker for darker fics!
- Alisha (who will forever fight the evil warnings that take all the fun out of reading stories)
