Annie, still loving it. I like your revisions, Lois's surprise that Clark was protecting her secret, even from Jimmy. Hasn't she figured out yet that she can trust him? :rolleyes:
And the scene in the club is definitely steamier in the rewrite - very nice. The bit with Lois plopping herself unexpectedly in Clark's lap was wonderful.
Much as I loved it, I was surprised to see the way you rewrote the kiss on the dance floor. Before was just a mere brushing of lips, but this is "more"... and as you point out in the next paragraph, Clark realizes that Lois must have known what she was doing. I am curious to know how this is going to affect what originally came several parts later in your story, and I'm looking forward to the rewrites on that as well!
Kathy
