I'm afraid I have to agree with the other commenters. I've read it twice, both before and after reading your responses here, and I'm no closer to figuring out what you're trying to imply. I surmised right away that CJ must be Lois's son, but the rest of it ... sorry, I'm lost! I get the feeling from your responses to the feedback that you've got something in there you think is obvious, and you're frustrated that we can't see it as clearly as you can. But I think you're going to need to give the readers a bit more to go on. It sounds like the prologue to a what could be a very interesting AU storyline. I hope you'll take it and expand on it. Good luck!
Kathy
