I really liked your Lois here, but I do wonder at your Clark. While it's clear that he's dismissive of the "Superman burnout" theory as a cover for his secret i.d., I would expect more of a reaction from him here: pain for what he just experienced the night before, discomfort at realizing that he's not quite as opaque as he wants to be, or admiration for Lois for her empathy. You've made it clear that Clark has a hard time dissembling around Lois because of his "connection" with her, and she herself sees that something isn't quite right. I would liked to get a bit more emotional reaction from him, even if it was only in his thoughts and not his actions.
It's always fun to see a classic Clark disappearance / Supes appearance, but I'd be careful if I were him!
Lois is sure to get suspicious soon.
I do continue to enjoy the dynamic you've created here between Lois and Clark, although he did seem a bit more submissive to her in this section than he's been in previous installments. Looking forward to MORE!
Hazel
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I'm thoroughly enjoying this and look forward to seeing where it is headed.
