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Sorry it's so short. A whole six pages. ::looks at chapter title:: Uh... I take it this means chapter thirteen will have thirteen pages? Either way...

Mom, you have your tree. Not sure if I did it justice to what I talked about it. You know, the humor that's supposed to be there. I think I have abstract confusion down, lord knows I suffer through it enough during math... Anyway, I need reader help. You see, there is supposed to be somewhat of a romance here, but I have barely enough understanding of what makes a romance to enable me to understand flirting when it's happening to someone else! Ask mom! She was there when the guy at the grocery store flirted with me and I hadn't a clue! ::growls::

Anyway, just some sudgestions that, you know, a dragon might think of as romantic. And what Dekani might think of romantic as well. The funnier the better. I'm sure my weird, math-confused brain will come up with something, but I don't want to plan for chapter whatever just yet.

And no, chapter seven will not have Nakomii thinking about Dekani as cute, that's for chapter thirteen, if that. Maybe later. Chapter seven will be a funny chapter, if you enjoy watching/reading the characters make compleat and utter idiots of themselves.

This is my longest post, not including any chapters for any stories. I'm scared. Goodbye.

Hmmmm....

As I told you in my fdk on your first five chapters: I only concentrated on the trekking and eating habits of your lead characters. Now I can see the possibility of an attachment, but more like mistress and pet. The woman and the dragon, staying together, hunting together. Intelligence and strength combined.

But a romance? I'll have to let you sweat on that one all by yourself, PhoenixRising! Or maybe your mom can help.

I am so looking forward how this story will develop. Please keep your Muse on the job.

Ursie

Kathleen and I talked about this, and she doesn't quite mean romance here. What she's really looking for is evidence of an intense friendship.

Kathleen, this was a good chapter. I know that you found it much more difficult to write, but it didn't show.

Looking forward to Chapter 7.

love,
Mom

What do you mean, much harder to write?! I just couldn't think, that's all. Hrmph. Anyways, mom's right, empathic friendship was what I meant, I was writing that on a sleep deprived brain, don't ask me how I coulda been sleep deprived except I'd had math that day... I think... when did I post chapter six? Gonna go work on said story, get a headache, yell at the brother...

Wait, no, have homework, will finish, get headache, read fanfiction and argue with said brother, I'm sure.

Ciao