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Just had a thought... Chris was wondering if their souls were masked somehow by the DP building. And then I thought, maybe they're getting lost amid the family members (all that Kryptonian DNA floating around)... or maybe there's interference from the contemporary incarnation of the soul mates?
I hadn't thought of that, but I have to say I like that idea. A lot.

Is it sad that I'm hanging around the feedback folder because its the closest I can get to getting a genuine fix of this (excellent) fic until Tuesday?

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You know... one of these days... I'm going to catch you right after you post so that I can nab the fdk folder naming rights.... not sure what I'll use them for just yet... but I'll think of something.... just how unethical would it be to start the fdk folder now? I mean, Wendy did it earlier...

Anyhoo... I'll decide that when I'm done with this part. wink

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Silas Kent moved with a show of reluctance from his date’s car to the doors of the Superman Museum. “Sorry about this,” he said again to the beautiful woman he had just rushed through dinner. “I have some paperwork. I just remembered.”
You won't stop BRing for me if I say I hate you, will you? Hrmm... well, it's not really *hate*... just a little... mecry I'll live... I'm sure Silas is a great guy. He's a Kent. And... I really do trust in you that this will be worth my time. wink (So... just ignore the whole paragraph, okay? Okay. wink )

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She raised one eyebrow and floored it. Or at least that would have been the effect if the city’s no speeding technology hadn’t been activated. And it always was, preventing rash acts, such as hers, from ever occurring. Still, it couldn’t stop her from thinking of speeding away, which she most definitely was.
Eep! Nice touch. Poor gal! And... sooo intrigued right now... reading on...

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Lois Lane did not sit on the laps of visiting dignitaries, no matter how handsome or how single. She didn’t sing and do Wanda Detroit on request; the family was most adamant about that. And any jokes that she was not actually Lois but Lois’s clone were strictly forbidden.

Some things, no matter how much time had passed, were never funny.
Yikes! And I whole-heartedly agree!! laugh

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He would take care of the few outstanding items on his desk, maybe call his sister and thank her for the set up and beg her not to send him on any blind dates ever again.
LOL! *whew* So it wasn't anything he did to upset a girlfriend. *whew* <g>

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Elise would be concerned and disappointed.
Oh boy... weaving the little circle tighter.... if you can weave circles... but I digress...

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Fending off questions about what his family gatherings were like, and if it was true all the superpowers had been diluted over the last six generations and there were no new super members among the younger family members, if all the genetic throwbacks were really gone.
Awwwwww!!!!! That's so sad!!!! mecry Is it true? Or just something they tell people? Or a nasty rumor?

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‘...the phrase ‘Wild Horses couldn’t drag me’ mean anything to you?’

‘Don’t want you... seeing it...just now, in... frame of mind.’

‘But you saw it! You better believe I’m...’
OH MY GOD!!! /me scoots the edge of her seat!!! This is going to be GOOOOD!

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Silas stopped and listened harder. They were on the third floor, not the second. Evidently having some sort of lover’s spat. They had picked a strange place for it. The Happily Ever After room.
Double "OY!" First one's because I feel dumb... Silas obviously has superior hearing. D'oh! And second one... is more of an "Oh boy" really... Clark. Is. In. The. HEA room!!!

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Though come to think of it, he could see how a couple might argue there. Hard to compete with the perfect, complete love of legendary soul mates.
Awwwwww!!! This line is... ironic? Is that the word I'm looking for? So sad, too!!! mecry

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Maybe that was why he rarely dated?
AWWWW!!!!!!! Now *that's* sad!!!

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He’d never bothered to mention it. Those in the extended family who were still gifted were rarer and rarer these days.... And besides, it was just hearing, so it wasn’t as if he was shirking his duties.
Awwww! Poor Silas!! frown

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The man’s laughter floated down the stairs. ‘Not really going to be a problem, is it?’
LOL!!!!! Not it's not. <g> And.... Oh boy!!!! Yipes.... /me scoots further to the edge of her seat...

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As he opened the door, a gust of air blew the one lock of hair he could never seem to control off his forehead before dropping it back down again.

The place was empty.
Damn!!! I was SO looking forward to that encounter... it'll still happen, right? frown

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Silas blushed hotly. What were they doing? And please God, don’t let it be what it sounded like.
LOL!!!! No, it's just Lois realizing that children are part of the package. *snicker*

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‘Forget to mention that?’ a hissed voice sounded from... overhead?
LOL!!!!! Omg! Poor Clark!! I betcha he's freaking big time!!! And... here it comes... Silas has noticed that their *overhead*!!

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He almost walked right into them. They were so close he couldn’t imagine how he hadn’t seen them until he was nearly on top of them. The man was looking at the wedding couple, the lights throwing his face half in shadow, but not enough to disguise his wide-eyed stare. The woman was standing in his embrace, her head on his chest and her eyes tightly closed.
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“Besides that,” she said. “Did you get a load of that bow I’m wearing on my wedding veil? Seriously. A hair bow? In what universe would I wear such a thing? Can you really imagine?”
LOL!!!!!

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She didn’t have to complete the sentence; she was in his arms and out under the stars in a blur.
ACK! ACK! ACK! And AAAACK!!!!!!!!!!!! NO FAIR!!!! They need to talk to Silas!!! Not talk themselves out of it!!! frown

Okay... it's officially Tuesday where I am... yup, 3:30 am... so it's later than that where you are... and... you will post this before you go to meet Wendy and the others... right? *whimper*

Sara (who's seriously considering staying up all night and refreshing the boards so she doesn't have to spend the day at work tortured over this, in hopes that it just might be posted before she has to leave... )


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Yeah, yeah... I'm back. laugh Just read the comments folder and had a few things to say. Man... that person that posted right before me is really going a bit overboard... dontcha think? goofy

Anyway...

All the talk of Silas being able to help and go tell the Peacekeepers... remember the family doesn't know about them... or at least that's the impression I got. But I think Shelia nailed it right on the nose saying that once Hank tells Elise... and Elise will surely hear about Hank's very odd experience... that's the key! So maybe we'll never get that Silas/L&C meeting. frown

And the other thing... about the soul tracer malfunction... Perhaps it was programmed so that the current incarnations wouldn't interfere... so basically, it just doesn't work for this time period, because... well, why would they need it to? goofy

Okay... that's all I had to say for now. smile

Sara (who's still debating that all-nighter...)


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I threw some of you for a loop!

And, honestly, I didn't see that coming. Well, I saw it coming, belatedly and with a bit of nail biting, when I was reading comments on the previous part. The 'We're married' and 'you owe me a lot of anniversary presents' conversation went over a bit differently than I expected. (Part of the thrill ride aspect of posting, that's for sure.)

I used the 'presents' line to show what Lois has called 'distancing.' A habit of hers, and just a small signal she was pulling back from the intense truth.

Also, the fight down the stairs, her vehement objection to Clark seeing what she had. Bread crumbs, really, leading to her state of mind. But nothing pointed and nothing directly said.

And, thus, it has taken six parts but we have reached my storytelling Kryptonite. (And, no, Wendy, it's *not* the commas. Or... not only the commas.) It's under-telling. So fearful am I of overstating anything, I tend to lean the opposite way.

That said, we *will* get inside Lois's head... erm... soonish. And I hope, once there, it will be satisfying enough to account for what looks like an about-face on her side. If not, though, do let me know! I've mulled over adding a few lines here and there, but I'm still undecided.

Now, have I said Thank you? Because, holy cow, thank you!! Your comments are so smart and so fun. I really appreciate the time and attention you are giving this.

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how come Silas has to spend two years working at the museum? There are so many thousands of descendants, why would anyone have to be 'forced' to work there? Surely someone would want to. Just a thought.
A good thought, too, Chris. And... I'm not saying. wink But that's an excellent catch!

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is there something in the ex-DP building that masks their souls? Is that why they haven't been found yet? If they leave the building for any length of time, could they be tracked?
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And then I thought, maybe they're getting lost amid the family members (all that Kryptonian DNA floating around)... or maybe there's interference from the contemporary incarnation of the soul mates?
Both of those are so good. And... I wish like all heck I'd thought of them! Really, I whimpered a bit and considered some heavy rewriting.

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The only thing I don't get is how everyone notices that Lois looks exactly like Lois, but no one seems to notice that Clark/Superman looks exactly like the originals. How could Silas not have commented on that?
Love this observation! Have been waiting for that to come up. All eyes are on Lois and her amazing resemblance, and there's Clark Kent standing right there and... nothing. I have a theory as to why, and it gets hinted at in this next part.

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And the other thing... about the soul tracer malfunction... Perhaps it was programmed so that the current incarnations wouldn't interfere... so basically, it just doesn't work for this time period, because... well, why would they need it to?
Ah. Well. I have no comment on this. Just... it's smart, isn't it? Maybe we should all sit back and admire it a bit?

And then this, because is made me laugh!

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Oh boy!!!! /me scoots clo... falls off the chair... picks herself back up and reads on...
Sara, thank you for your amazing feedback that reads longer than the story parts! I don't know how you do it!

And thank you, too, to a certain teacher/lurker for her wonderful comments.

Ok. If you're all still with me, part 7 is on its way.

I'd love to know what you think, good and bad.

CC


You mean we're supposed to have lives?

Oh crap!

~Tank
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