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CC--

You're even a genius tweaker! I must admit, I've been a tremendous pain in CC's patoot!. I've even been fired from my job as BR because I've been the most clueless BR in history! Why, I was the Andrus of BRing!

:p

But, like Andrus, I desperately want CC to forgive me because, after all, I asked her to keep in the bakery.

But all's Wells that ends Wells as the Peacekeepers might say! This section is rockin' and rollin' along and I'm so in love with Hank and Madge (and now Elise).

Have a great trip, CC!

Sherry

Two weeks!!

We have to wait two weeks!!

Jose

LOL the bakery! Let's hope they are disguised as bakers! two weeks is too long! No fair! Get back here<g> Good job, this is a hoot! Laura

And of course it's Lois who finally realizes what's what. All he can come up with is a bakery..LOL! Poor Hank, he's lucky to have a kick @ss wife!

I am selfishly glad that you're on a mini-hiatus since I am off on vacation myself next week.

Great send off..can't wait for you to get back!!

~Liz

Hi,

Great piece.

Why Andrew and not Hank or Maggie?

An important organization and the family don’t know about it?

Why haven Silas call for help already?


In two weeks!

More ASAP, please.

MAF

YES! YES! Take them to the bakery!

But with over 6 more parts promised, why do I think it won't be that easy?

Wake me up when the two weeks are over.

Okay, I can wrap my head around it now. At first I must admit I had a small conniption when I realized Silas new nothing about the peacekeepers, et al. But then I took a nap, and I said to myself a few minutes after I woke up, "Jen, you realize Elise knows nothing about what her husband does, either." And so I sit in my bed 6 hours before I'm supposed to get up wondering why. Yes, the Lane-Kents are one of the most important families in existence. But they're just a family, and all they would want would be to be treated as such...just like everyone else. And for Utopia to be Utopia here, you can't just have smatterings of people know what real life is really like, besides the peacekeepers, of course. Granted, Tempus is someone that threatened their family many times, so in one sense, I would think they'd need to know about him...but it's supposed to be Utopia, right? Evil's not "supposed" to exist.

I don't know. My 1:30am mind is at odds.

JD


Edit:

Ah, so very true! Great point.

Actually, Shadow, I think you have a point. Lex Luthor got documented in the museum's history, but John Doe/Tempus didn't?

On second thought it does make sense: Lex Luthor was news. Lois & Clark were the only people aware of the events that occurred in Tempus Fugitive & the alternate universe, and "John Doe" got the public credit for the events in the third Tempus episode.

Waiting two full weeks for another update will definitely be a hard task but so far your story was great enough to keep up the suspense!

Okay, now you've killed my thought why they didn't ask about the Peacekeepers because they don't seem to be known publicly. With hindsight shocking Silas with Tempus was not so dumb
The other parts of the story around Hank and Maggie seem very heartfelt to me and they're a good addition to the main plot.

Thanks for this story so far, for giving us so many fast and regular updates - CC, you're doing a really great job

Sometimes you have to reread from the beginning to find interesting plot points:

Now if Tempus came earlier than Lois' diary stated, then a possible conclusion to the story is that they end up returning in the morning, when the sun is rising, having forgetten everything that happened in Utopia.

Anyway, two weeks will go by quickly, but unfortunately for me, I will be on vacation for one of those weeks, and could really get caught up on my reading...oh well.

Have a great trip!

Good point - that's an interesting idea and it makes a lot of sense. One of the neat things about time travel, tucked in among all the paradoxes, is that something like that could happen, bringing them back to the present later than when they left, but in time to "fulfill" the future's story of the day of Superman's debut.

Of course, they could also return at that time but still have their memories of events. They've been fast-forwarded in time, and their relationship has been fast-forwarded as a result. They've gone from Lois's awe of this strikingly different man, to a CK=S revelation, to a return of Lois's initial behavior to Clark, to disbelief at what they are seeing and hearing around them, to acceptance and love in the most recent parts.

We've seen some nice things and some unappealing things about Utopia. The Superman museum is over-the-top. A museum dedicated to Superman is, in itself, not actually that hard to believe, as it's the sort of thing humanity would do for someone universally admired. Even having actors role-playing parts isn't necessarily a bad thing, or unexpected, really. But this particular museum is so theatrical, so overdone...

If Lois and Clark make it back to their time with their memories of recent events intact, their fast-forwarded relationship may not harm the time line. Yes, it's happened sooner, but the end result looks like it'll be the same - the founding of a family responsible for bettering the future. And frankly, forwarned is forearmed - maybe they'd be able to dilute some of the stuff that makes the current Utopia a bit unappealing.

Poor old Tempus may actually end up doing Utopia a favor .

~Toc

Hi CC,

I've been away for the weekend and have just caught up and all I can say is, how could you do this to your poor readers?

Don't get me wrong, the story is as wonderful and compelling as ever, but how can you leave us here for two weeks, worrying over Utopia and it's wonderful inhabitants?

But, that said, I know real life is every bit as important as fanfic... did I just admit that? I should bite my tongue!

Hurry back, CC, and this is one reader who will be waiting, not so patiently, for the next part.

Yours Jenni

And another fun part.

The good cop/bad cop theme had me in stitches, especially when Lois knew instinctively which one she'd be playing then blinked when Silas suddenly became the bad cop. LOL!

Gah! Lois ... Lois ... Lois is holding even more tightly to the idea that they are married than Clark. Oh, so good ...

Major, major woobie lip time. Believe me, Silas, I know exactly what you mean. (And another nice nod to future as fandom.)

You know what gets me about this part? Not just that she goes to him for comfort and he instinctively gives it (probably getting it for himself at the same time, just by touching her), but the next part ... the Krypton part. Because it's *Lois* who thinks this. The soulmates thing, the bond, the deep, powerful *understanding* that they have between them ... is right here. She knows him. Knows his mind. Knows his heart and his fears. Even after just a few weeks. Two hundred years and a few weeks, but all the same. It's beautiful.

I love him ... love them. And am I the only one who can't help but picture Lois and Clark in this scene? I can't remember if you gave us physical descriptions in the earlier parts, so maybe Hank and Elise are blond and look nothing like our L&C, but the way they interact, the way he loves her so intensely yet takes the weight of the world on his shoulders to protect her and her family ... it's very Superman-ish, even if he doesn't have powers. Whether he has Clark's soul or not, he's a true hero.

Ah! The jolt; the bond. Minor mention, yes, but I'm a big fan of the bond coming out in subtle ways like this so ... thanks.

ROTFL!!! Literally! Well, almost. But I did laugh so hard and so long that my husband poked his head down the stairs and said, "Are you OK? What could possibly be so funny??" LOL!

And then the ending ... the last scene ... fabulous dialogue, CC! From "He loads new data kind of slow" to "Lucky for them they're so good looking" ... awesomely fun! And, "the bakery". What a way to end it ... just so freakin' brilliant, you are.

You know what this reminds me of? The middle point of an hour episode. You know, how they always spend the first fifteen minutes setting up the problem, then the second fifteen minutes building up the seriousness of the problem until it reaches a crescendo ... and then the next two acts are devoted to running around to find the actual solution.

And that's where we're at! The extra long commercial break at the half-hour ... a two week long commerical break. That's a lot of Pepsodent.

Sigh. This is when I need my fanfic TiVo to do some time shifting.

Have a safe and wondeful trip, CC. We'll all be eagerly awaiting your return.

Kathy

EDITED TO ADD: Now that I've read the earlier comments, I'm surprised that so many readers are shocked Silas doesn't know about the Peacekeepers. To me, that was a given. If Silas thought Tempus was a comic book character, why would he know about time cops and peacekeepers? They have clearly gone to a lot of trouble to make sure no one knows -- not even Elise, and she's married to one of them -- so there was never any doubt in my mind that Silas would have no clue what Lois and Clark were talking about. Indeed, the mere fact that he thought about the bakery at all makes me proud of the boy's observation skills.

As per what I said on nfic fdk, I have to hurry cause my cheap net connection goes dead if I pause too long, but GREAT, Awesome reading!!! I love this story, and hate the idea that there's gonna be a pause and yet, I UNDERSTAND!! Believe me.

So Everybody else has pointed out the good spots let me concur and say keep going!! LOVE IT!!


TEEEEEJ

I love this story and your writing, it's awesome.

I'm gonna have to wait like two weeks for more? Well, I bet it'll be worth the wait.

two... weeks... !!!


James

This is all so good. I know I say that every feedback folder, but this time I *really* mean it.

Thank you for your great, insightful comments. You're so smart! Have I mentioned??

Also, the rest of this piece has just landed with a loud kerplop into the collective laps of my BRs. (Those who encouraged me to keep the bakery when I almost chickened out are certainly included in that number, no matter how badly they beat me up. And, oh, it was baaaad...<g>)

Now if I may brag just the tiniest bit (if I get insufferable, do cover your eyes and I'll apologize ahead of time...), the whole fic works out to 18 parts! 18!!

Ok, if you consider that once upon I time I thought it would be four parts and I'd write it in a long weekend, that's not quite a victory.

But let's not consider that. Instead, I'm thinking back to when I pulled out all the pieces, took a good long look, and feared I was looking at a 30 part fic...

18 parts, people!

Only six more to go, and they'll be up on schedule next week.

Thank you for staying with me. Can't tell you how well I appreciate it. (I know I always say that, but this time I *really* mean it.)

CC

Next week ... like, a whole week from now? Still?

Whimper.

Kathy (who is glad CC returned from her trip safe and sound. And who REALLY hopes those BRs will hurry up and edit the rest of the story so we can get these final six parts. You know, we won't hold it against you if you decide to start posting before next week. Tomorrow is Tuesday, after all, and a Thursday and Saturday do follow it. You could, you know, just kind of forget you said that about two weeks ...)

Go, Betas, Go!!!!
It's tough waiting! And yes, I'm glad you kept the bakery.

Artemis

So I was thinking about Silas today. Yeah... I know, sanity has left the building, but we knew that. Anyhoo... I started thinking about Silas and the fact that he hasn't told anyone that he has a few of what's left of the Super genes. He'd just assume not tell anyone because then it'd be expected of him to join the Justice League (assuming that's what it was called - too lazy to double check ), which he's told us isn't so much functional but for the purpose of keeping the Utopians happy and doing a little government-type work.

I'll spare you the Demolition Man tangent, but if you've seen the movie, you'll know what I mean.

Silas wants something to happen so he can feel useful. Something to give his life meaning. Maybe (since CC is *not* going to be evil and erase their wonderful memories - or at least not all of them ) when Lois and Clark get back to their time, things in Utopia will shift just a little bit and not massively... because, really, Lois and Clark still fall in love and get married so it can't change that much, right? Maybe it'll change just enough to the point where a little Super help might be needed at times. And maybe Silas will find that sense of purpose after all.

Don't mind me... just throwing ideas a la KathyB, wondering if they'll hit the mark... hoping that I don't hit it too squarely and have CC mad at me for revealing the ending.

Haven't even read part 12 yet... trying to hold out just a *wee* bit longer so I don't have to wait for 13 so long. Have no fear, I'll be back with comments later.

Sara