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Ya did good!  Nice job on this part..love the emotion between these too and the love for the baby from Clark *oh*! Plus Clark FLEW!! YAY!! ~Liz 
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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That's true with full term babies, but premature babies often don't have any deformation of the skull because they're smaller. I've seen preemies both ways, as a former Labor and Delivery nurse. I guess you can have it either way you choose.  Nan
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Ooo, didn't think of that! That is a very good point (pun intended)!  I still look at the pics of Brandon with his little torpedo head! ~Liz
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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Re: your concerns re: childbirth
I wouldn't describe it as ripping, tearing or jagged unless something really was going wrong. Think major mega menstrual cramps: cramping, squeezing, pulling, etc. I probably would have written "intensely painful" rather than "disgustingly painful." (homebirth, 9 pound baby)
You did an excellent job of conveying the anxiety involved without getting bogged down in the details though.
And since I've been moved to comment; I'd like to take a moment to mention that I think you're doing a really good job with this story and I've been eagerly looking forward to each new part.
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Childbirth is definitely one of those: Have to do it to know it things. I still think you did an excellent job at trying to portray what you did.
What got me though, was your description of the child - of her reaction to the child.
Those sweet special starfish hands. I am choked just remembering them. I kissed them - and those tiny feet - a billion times.
And that feeling of knowing you would kill anyone who harmed that child. Oh yes. I know it well.
Mama tiger. That is what i am.
Your chapter moved me to tears. I hope that makes you happy, because it should.
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Wow, Sara! This was excellent! Okay, so let's have the last few parts so these two can finally get together!  Wendy 
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Holy Christ, I must admit I had a small conniption when the truck broke down. But then I prayed to the FoLC Gods that Clark's powers would come back. So thank God. :p Love the baby's name!
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AWW, wonderful part. Those two are so sweet!! 
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Aw very nice chapter, I keep hopeing some how some way that it is Clarks baby from some trip in time they forgot about. Oh well if it has to be Lex's I juat hope he turns out like his mother. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
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Hi, Great part. Love the name. Now, lets get rid of Luthor and make Lois a widow. More ASAP, please. MAF
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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Sara WOW, an excellent part!  and look forward to reading more. Now, they need to get rid of Luthor.  Tricia 
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Now, lets get rid of Luthor and make Lois a widow Oh Yessss!!!! Kill Lex and make them happy :rolleyes: karla
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Wow. I am absolutely thrilled with the response to this part. I mean it. I'm awed. And honoured. And very, very grateful. Thank you all so much!!! Your chapter moved me to tears. I hope that makes you happy, because it should. And your fdk on this one moved *me* to tears, Leela  Sara
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