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#24271 09/18/05 04:30 PM
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Hi,

Great part. grumble Bruce should tell Clark about Paul.


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Lois got out of the bathtub and put on a pair of pajama sweat pants and tank top. She slipped on her bedroom slippers and sat in the corner of the couch. She put her knees up to her chest and hugged them to her as the tears started to flow endlessly again. There was nothing on in the apartment; no lights, no TV, radio. Just silence and an occasional nose sniffling and pulling Kleenex from a box.
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Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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Very well done, with one exception.

The scene where Batman arrives to rescue Lois is a little unbelievable. He's wayyy to civil and nice about things.

I will send further comments in a private email.

James.


“…with God everything is possible.” Matthew 19:26.


Also read Nan's Terran Underground!
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Sheila, where are you?

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Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
MAF

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