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I'm sorry about the delay. I was having phone problems, and haven't been on line since last Wednesday. Let me know what you think!
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Columnist
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I'm glad that you posted the next part. I was missing your story.I read it right when I saw your post.
It was a great part, like always. I'm very glad that Lois know the truth about Clark now. That will help her to understand better why Clark don't have good answers to the questions about the murder. And maybe to understand what really happened.
I hope that she'll accept quickly the Clark's differences, and that we'll have to read some romantic scene before the end of the story, the kind of romantic scene that you wrote in the firsts posts.
Anyway, all that murder investigation story is great.
Good job.
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Top Banana
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Wow! Great action, Shayne.  I think I can guess a bit of what's going to happen next, but you always surprise me, so I can't afford to be too smug.  Yvonne
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Wow the moent of truth. She took it pretty well. I hope the bad guys get caught. More soon. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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Top Banana
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I'm a firm believer in the fact that God doesn't put any more on us than we can bear. He does however make us come to Jesus every so often.
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Hack from Nowheresville
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This is the first time in this story that I've had trouble keeping track of exactly where everybody is. There's a gap between when they took off and when he opened the trap door on the roof; which roof? What lab?
Everything else worked very well.
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Okay! Now we're getting somewhere.
Nan
Earth is the insane asylum for the universe.
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Pulitzer
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Hi, Great part. Love it! He didn’t get a chance to complete that thought. The thin plume of smoke from their car was joined by a black, ugly trail of smoke, with flames licking up the sides of the building from which they’d come.
“There are still people in there.”
There had been a night watchman, a janitor and their contact, a lab technician. Clark didn’t know whether there were more people inside or not.  This people want to destroy all the evidence. Can he save the evidence? “If I don’t come back, you need to get out of town as quickly as possible. I don’t know who’s after us, but I’d feel a lot better knowing that you were out of danger.”
“What are you going to do?”
“There are people inside that building. I’ve got to get them out.” Clark spoke with a conviction that had become foreign to him over recent years. This was the one thing that he’d remained sure of. He’d been given his gifts to help others. :rolleyes: He thinks Lois is going to do what he said. :rolleyes: More ASAP, please. MAF 
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
MAF
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Ditto Nan!
Now all the cards are on the table. Let's hope that Clark gets a royal flush!
James
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Finally Lois caught the truth. I imagine now she'll be able to help Clark.  Andreia 
"My wife's love is what unites Krypton and Earth in my heart. Without it, without her, I truly would be in hell."
~ Superman: Man of Tomorrow #15
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Just caught on to this story. (I was missing from this corner of the world during the summer and so missed this story) I am so glad you started rewriting SWK and the story rocks with its realistic outlook on what-if. Looking fwd to subsequent chapters. ~Ankit  
If she had to move heaven and Earth, perhaps come back to haunt Perry and explain the story after they'd killed her, she would do it.
Waking a Miracle by Aria
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