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Great story! I just caught up with it. I also forgot he had super-hearing, so that was a nice touch.

JD

Thanks Seme and JD

JD wrote: Pam said the same thing! I'm wondering if it's not clear... or if I could add a line that would make it clearer, like when she saw him looking at her, it was "almost like he could hear her"... or is that too obvious? And then Wendy wrote that when they started whispering, she was waiting for the sign that Clark heard, so she was looking for it... I am not sure what the overall take was, though... Hmm...


Seme wrote:
I hadn't thought about a sequel actually. I'll keep it in mind, if anyone would want to read a continuation. The downfall of Luthor, most likely

Thanks again, everyone! Glad you enjoyed the story!


~NICOLE

Nicole, I would leave it as it is. Those who remember about Clark's hearing will have fun guessing whether or not he'll hear, and those who temporarily forget will realise as soon as he interrupts Lois and Luthor at the altar.

And anyone who doesn't figure it out then has the reminder later, in the section where you switch to Clark's point of view. It's all made clear there:

I think adding in any reminder earlier would feel too obvious, as if you think readers couldn't possibly work it out for themselves. Whether we get it at the time or later, it still works.


Wendy

Thanks, Wendy

It was what I was thinking too, because the addition of the line kind of looked glaring, like a hit on the head. And I do not want to do that to anyone. It's true, since it's in the middle of Lois's POV, it might not be completely obvious immediately to everyone, but it does all get explained later in Clark's.


~NICOLE

Nicole, I really enjoyed this little story, but I, too, didn't realize Clark would hear Lois's whisper at the altar--not because I forgot he had super hearing but because he seemed so totally involved in his own despair that I didn't think he could notice anything else. What I ended out thinking was that Clark had made the decision to stop the wedding on his own, and I was feeling disgusted because Lois hadn't had any real part in saving herself. The person who has to make the biggest change (Lois, in this story) is the one who has to make the grand gesture for the ending to be satisfying, and I was feeling cheated for Clark--until the story finally switched to his POV and I realized that he had actually heard her attempt to stop the wedding.

Anyway, what I was thinking you might do is put a brief line in this last section from Clark's POV: Possibly insert it after "He couldn't look," and put something about trying not to listen, but not being able to block out the sound of the doors opening and taffeta swishing as she started down the aisle toward … him.

While I understand Wendy's point, I think this would be a fairly seamless way to remind readers who had temporarily forgotten about Clark's abilities and to reassure those who think he's temporarily deafened by his thoughts.

say nicole, I have the prefect trailer for u. but my computer is not that much up to date. but it this song call (Listen to your Heart). it goes great with the story. but i don,t know who sings it. is there a way u can do it or ask someone who can.

Hey! Sorry; I've been out of commission for a bit! Getting caught up on reading and whatnot now.

Sheila .... thank you for your suggestion about the hearing dilemma. It gives me food for thought. If anything, I will try to find a way to keep it about the same, so some people can have the fun of guessing and others can be pleasantly surprised when the POV switches. I've sent it to a GE, but I will brainstorm with her about it. Thanks for reading the story, and for your feedback

Lovesuper97, thanks for your comments too! I am not too familiar with trailers actually, but I do know the song you're talking about. It's a great song by Roxette. The group DHT recently made a techno remix of it as well. So I'm not sure which version you're thinking about. Most likely the original. Anyone who would want to do a trailer for this story is more than welcome to do so; I'd be so interested to see it! And I agree that this song works really well with this story. I AM actually interested in the whole music video aspect of all of this, but am not sure I have the means to do it; I wouldn't know how to begin to get my clips onto the computer. Is that what a trailer is? A music video? I'm lost!

~NICOLE

Nicole! You've never seen a fanfic trailer? Wow! You don't know what you're missing!

Here's where you'll find all the fanfic trailers made to date. Enjoy!


Wendy

i heard the slow version of it cool huh

Actually, a little bird on irc told me recently that someone might be working on this one, even as we speak. Although as a music vid, I believe, rather than a trailer. No promises - never count your trailers/music vids until they post - but keep an eye out in FoLC Productions and you might just get your wish.

And even if someone posts it as a music vid, that's no good reason why it can't be used as a trailer for a specific story.

Nicole, I haven't read the story but I've got enough data from this thread to understand your dilemma and, for what it's worth, I have to say that I agree with Wendy. I'm a big fan of not necessarily having to tell the reader everything they need to know right there and then and so, for me, if the information that's needed is there at some point in the story, before the end, that's good enough for me. I prefer that to having everything spelled out for me, upfront.

LabRat

Okay, so I've just spent hours (since my computer is a super slow connection) becoming familiar with the wonderful world of trailers! These are great! So many of my favorite stories are up there! And a few I hadn't read, but will now that the trailer's hooked me! What a great idea. Thanks for the link, Wendy. Someone had even done a trailer for my story Have A Little Faith in Me, I coudln't believe I hadn't heard about all of this earlier!!

Lovesuper97, yeah the original/slow version by Roxette is the best one!! I'd be interested to see a trailer or something with this song; I just couldn't do it myself. I honestly wouldn't know where to begin. How do people get the clips onto the computer? I am technologically illiterate!! I have the utmost respect for those who aren't!

Thanks for your imput, LabRat, about the hearing thing; I am thinking the same thing because every time I DO try to add even just one more line, it feels so glaringly obvious. And that's not what I want. I keep ending up with it being the way I had posted it. I can see all points on this, really, but in the end, I think I'm just going to do it that way and let people guess and others be pleasantly surprised.

Thanks!

~NICOLE

I just finished reading this story, and I loved it A wonderful twist on the end of season one. Clark being all heroic as Clark, not Superman....great stuff

Thank you! I do believe he's quite the hero in his everyday ordinary man clothes