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Terry,

I agree that this part bothered me also. I recently finished "Lonely is the Man" and it covers the story of Clark at age 250 finding his next love. One of the points of the story was that everyone thought the original Clark had died (the remainder of his and Lois's offspring and their offspring had died) due to his being very frail the last time anyone saw him (doing a heroic thing) and he disappeared. Well he actually had just quit being Superman and without the strain and the help of plenty of sun he basically rejuvenated back to his late 20's. This reference in this chapter keeps me wondering (back to that regeneration thing) that if he just kept himself under control for a period of time wouldn't the heart repair itself. Now we know how hard that would be for him, in the referenced story he had offspring to keep up the heroic stuff while he just went into retirement.

It continues to be part of this story that just doesn't fit for me.

Mike

I shouldn't read this story when I'm feeling depressed. I read chapter 3 when I was already down, and it was so sad!!!!!!!! I think I almost cried.

I read this chapter when I was in a much better mood.

I'm glad that Lois and Clark have a better support system now that Dr. Klein and the Lanes are in on the secret. Something that confused me as I read, though, is that at the beginning of the conversation I assumed that Jonathan and Martha didn't know about his heart, but by the end it seemed like they had already known. I guess that they would have called when they found out that Superman had collapsed after the bridge collapse, but they wouldn't necessarily have known about the results of the tests that Dr. Klein ran. It would have been less confusing if there was a mention of having talked to Clark's parents before the Lanes came over.

You're doing a great job of capturing the characters' emotions, especially how distraught Lois and Clark conflicting with their joy about their baby.

Jonathan and Martha shifted uncomfortably in their seats. Clark and Lois had both spoken to them at length about letting Sam and Ellen in on the secret, the two of them having dropped everything to take a red-eye flight to Metropolis the day before. Clark had wanted to fly them in himself, but Dr. Klein's warning about using his powers had rung in his ears and chilled him to his very soul. To use his powers, especially in some grand fashion, would put even more stress on his heart, which could very well be fatal.

I was angling for this: (and I may need to spell it out better in the fic)

The damage Deathstroke (coupled with whatever his body was doing after the youth sucking machine) was immediate and permanent - like it killed off heart cells, so there was no chance to recover from the damage. That added additional stress onto the living cells, which broke them down too.

Also, plot gods?

Actually it is the plot gods concept and of course your excellent story telling that has kept me in this thing rather than just dropping our due to my reservations about your story premise. I keep thinking I will just stop then the next chapter comes, I read it, and get back hooked again.

Your true evilness is spinning a good tale, even one I really don't want to read.

Mike

Beverly's interpretation of Ellen Lane has always bothered me ...until now! What a great scene!

Now that the Lanes and Dr. Klein are onboard, where do we go from here?

Um...there's some not so happy stuff coming. That's all the warning I can give you.

I appreciate knowing at the outset that things won't go well. Sometimes I'm in a mood where I can handle sad stories and enjoy them, and other times I just want some happy fluff. Despite being apprehensive about what's going to happen, you've written a compelling story that I'm enjoying, and I look forward to reading the rest of it.

Cardiac stem cell transplants?

Cardiac stem cell transplants?

Interesting theory, but I don't think stem cell research was that advanced in 1998.

Sorry, guys!

Yeah but neither was time travel

Mike

I've got it! Maybe they could clone Clark's heart from of the healthy cells still in it so he could be his own heart donor. I know the notes for cloning had been destroyed, but with Clark's eidetic memory, he'd be able to recreate them. Assuming, of course, that he actually really did see them in TOGoM, and assuming that the process would also work on Kryptonians.

I see that part five has dropped. I'm half looking forward to, and half dreading, reading it...

Joy,
Lynn

Part five actually dropped in error. For a little while last night, I was convinced it was already Thursday.

Part five actually dropped in error. For a little while last night, I was convinced it was already Thursday.

Here I was thinking you were speeding up the update process because of all of the interest .

Mike