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It's comforting to see that this degenerate version of Clark hasn't completely thrown all decency to the winds! I almost felt bad for him (almost )

I hope Lucy's ok! and oooh Dr. Carlton had better watch out for that child-protecting, double-dealing, sexually frustrated Superman! I hear it's not healthy to be on his bad side!

Lol. I debated a lot about how far he'd go, but in the end, he wants Lois' wholehearted devotion above all else, in order to truly feel like he's won. Anything tainting her decision would be fun but not worth while.


More on Lucy in this chapter! Sorry to leave her hanging a bit. And you got "sexually frustrated" right. This Clark isn't quite as used to being as patient as our canon one... Waiting at all is a good first step.

Chapter 47 is up and ready to read! It was nice taking a break, but now we're back at it and there's no slowing this train down. Strap in folcs.

Happy Wednesday Midnight! Chapter 48 is up and ready to read! hope you enjoy!

Hi Mouse!

Aaaaannnnnd, secret number one is out.

**rubs hands together** Let's see where this takes us. Will Dark Clark have the nerve to fess up to all his lies? Will he succeed in turning Lois on Lex? Given what Lucy overheard I think its safe to say that relationship is toast. Clark's going to have to figure out what to do with Nigel before that worm does anymore damage.

Great job as always.

Yeesh.

I've been a bad boy, not commenting as I should have. Boo on me for that. It's just that I'm still trying to wrap my head around these versions of Lois and Clark and Lex.

And it's not the writing or the story premise that has me off-balance. I simply can't figure out which of our major bad guys to root for. Superman is shockingly dark - so dark that I wouldn't put it past him to kill Nigel. Lex is fighting a private war with Clark over both business and their past relationship, with a beautiful and desirable woman tossed in the mix. Lois can't see what's right in front of her face - knows she's not in love with Lex but doesn't realize that he's a criminal, nor can she see Clark's evil deeds for what they are.

All three of them (Lois less so) have believed that one can do bad things up to a point and then stop while still remaining a good person. Each of them has crossed that line now. What will happen to Lucy, given what she knows? Will Lex complete his plan against Bureau 39? Will Clark tell Lois everything - and I mean everything? Will the Superman persona survive, and if so, what will be his focus? Just how much will Lois let Clark get away with before she trips on something worse? It's enough to envision a Hamlet-like Tank ending where only Bill Henderson and Lucy are left to tell the tale. 'Tis a grim task you've set for yourself.

Although Miranda's "Honey-buns of Steel" comment was priceless. A new nickname for Superman! "Superman and his honey-buns of steel stop runaway subway train. Film at eleven!"

Every time I think you've hit the highest peak in the tension, another one comes along to top it. Excellent tale, and well-told. Keep it up!

Pssst! It's Monday.

Yup! I'm starting to get excited.


Hehehehe... So many questions I can't answer... Well, I can't answer beyond chapter 49. Because yes, chapter 49 is going up right now! Happy (very late, technically Tuesday) Monday!

Also, I'm aware I've been slacking on keeping up on all my links in here and the TOC. sorry for any inconvenience this may have caused! Was hoping to get some time to fix it today, but it may be later in the week before I get a chance to fix it... Good news is, it'll be fixed soon! So keep your eyes peeled.

I know, I know! The day got away from me Posting now

Hi Terry!


Haha, no worries! Been busy over here. I'm just happy you're still reading and it's a complicated universe.


If it's any consolation, and it's probably not, it took me a long time to figure that out too.

All parties are more than flawed individuals. And ignorance is bliss. Lois doesn't yet realize how true that will be.

Yes. And the boundaries will still be pushed a bit further. You always hear that the villain supposes he's the hero all along... I hope that comes across, especially considering how slighted Lex feels, and how doggedly in the right he thinks he is. Although by that logic, you can still extend that theorem to the other two main players.

One of those questions will be partially answered in this chapter 49.

Oooh. Don't tease me. I'm flattered and tempted all at once. I love Tank endings, though Lois' hair may be growing out instead of getting a chop. And there's a reason Hamlet is my favorite Shakespeare tragedy. Although, if I'm being transparent, I equally love Othello.

I love the idea of Lois slipping the term into an article, and the whole world loves it enough to make it a thing. Clark would naturally be humiliated that the world was only ever referring to him by his assets.
CLARK: Mom! I need my cape to be thicker! I don't want anyone staring at my rear!

Alternatively, I also debated the use of the term "honey Bunches of steel-cut oats" but ultimately liked this one better.


Thank you! High praise I worried a lot about stacking too much drama up, but I'm glad it's working out. Hope you keep reading and enjoying! I know we've come so far, but there's still a ways to go.

And so, Act three ends, not with a metaphorical bang...

Hope you're all enjoying! Thanks in triplicate to Val for editing and re-editing this scene ad nauseum, and helping me keep some steam while keeping it (mostly) clean! Next Act will be starting without a break, so this Monday! I'll have a new thread dedicated to feedback for that coming soon. In the meantime, all comments and thoughts through to this act are welcome here!

Chapter 50 is up and ready to read. Enjoy!

RJS.

I highly recommend you finish this fic before assuming anything. There may be familiar characters and plot points as there are with many fics but Mouse has done something with them to put her own creative twist that goes way beyond a simple episode rewrite.


Waits patiently for Mouse to finish posting the rest so Folc can take her gag off and finally say what's been on her mind since she started Betaing this thing.

Sorry if it disappoints. I did state from the get go that this story wouldn't be everyone's cup of tea... That said, I do appreciate you sticking around so long to read it.

First and foremost, just want to address the originality point... I appreciate the compliment, but this is fanfiction. There is absolutely nothing original about it. By definition, every piece will be derivative of the show, the comics, the companies involved etc. I may have put a new spin on it and I like to think that it's creative and entertaining, but even the twist I have has been done before elsewhere. If you squint, you'll see it.

Secondly, I personally am of the opinion that the same sort of events occur in every timeline. I think it keeps things fun and familiar to readers without following anything too closely. That said, and if you continue on reading, you'll see that I don't stick with the script very long for any of these plot points, and it's all in the name of setting up something else larger. Also, it's not the first episode I've tied in or mentioned. In that regard, no, I don't consider this an episode rewrite. It also doesn't take place in the same universe of the show.

I hope selfishly you do keep reading, whether or not you enjoy. It's a story I wanted to tell and it's a fun universe to explore. But, like I've mentioned many times, I don't expect everyone to enjoy it, so you aren't obligated to.

Stay classy Mouse!