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Story is here

It's been a while since I've written, and I fear I've gotten out of practice. I'm very grateful for the opportunity, though, and hope this story is enjoyable. smile


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I loved this story. Jon melted my heart with his questions.

How wonderful to seeing you posting fiction again. I hope you post more here soon.

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Liked this one. Obviously, Jon is a very bright kid. This was a very cute story


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All I want now is a series to go along with this adorable fic ^_^

Jon is so cute and I'd be very interested in seeing the fallout from this incident grin

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Aww, that was so sweet. Poor Jon. It' can be hard ot have Superman as a dad sometimes, especially if he has to "change" his personality. And than all that questions that are so typical for a kid an adult eventually would never ask. I was curious to see what an author would make out of that challenge, and you certainly didn't disappoint. Now I'm with Blueowl here, I want a continuation to see how the world reacts to the information that Superman has a kid. :-)
and PS: Yeah, I'm aware I still have to post my own story. I will. I just need a calm hour here or os to write it down, and you won't believe how hard it is to get that here. Argh!


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Awww, poor boy!! He's just the cutest!!

So thrilled to see you write again, Queen!

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You are definitely NOT out of practice! Good work as always.

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Queenie, this is marvelous. You made the building collapses and the random fires and the traffic control system breakdown fade into the background and gave us a little boy who wants his daddy and a father who is desperately torn between love for his family and his perception of duty. And in just a few words, too! You rode this bicycle very skillfully, even if you did have to dust off the seat first.

My favorite section is the closing.

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Clark picked up his son, tucking the boy's face into his shoulder so no one could get a good look. The coat and hat would probably need to disappear, but that could be taken care of later. Really, all of the repercussions of today could be dealt with later; right now, only one thing was important. “Come on, let's get you back to Mommy before your uncle winds up in the trunk of her car.”

I can see Jimmy frantically searching for Jon with the sure and certain knowledge that if he doesn't succeed almost immediately he's doomed. Touching and funny, this vignette is a success. Thank you.



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I love stories about Lois and Clark with kids. Clark was born to be a father. He's perfect to the role.

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Jon's lower lip trembled. “Please turn back into my daddy.”

“What?” Clark blinked.

He's a smart kid. But being the son of Lois and Clark this is no surprise.


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The boy reached into his pocket and pulled out a mashed red and white lump. “I'll give you chocolate,” he offered, his little voice starting to break. “You can have all my Christmas chocolates, *and* my presents! Just please turn back into my daddy so he can come home!”

Awwww.... Poor kid! mecry

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“But...why?” asked Jon.

It was a question Clark had asked himself repeatedly, the past few days, though he hadn't spent any time contemplating an answer. “Well,” he reflected, “buildings like this one have been falling down, lately, and others have caught fire...” The thought that these incidents might all be connected suddenly occurred to Clark. “Then of course there have been a lot of car accidents,” he added, noting the break in the pattern. “...caused by traffic lights breaking down,” he realized.

“Why?” Jon asked again.
How old is he? The "whys" sound like my almost three years old daughter. grin

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Clark picked up his son, tucking the boy's face into his shoulder so no one could get a good look. The coat and hat would probably need to disappear, but that could be taken care of later. Really, all of the repercussions of today could be dealt with later;
Were people able to hear what was said? He could be a lost kid looking for his parents. But I'm glad Clark didn't try to hide the truth and took time to take care of him.

It has potential to become a bigger story, you know. wink

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Clark picked up his son, tucking the boy's face into his shoulder so no one could get a good look. The coat and hat would probably need to disappear, but that could be taken care of later. Really, all of the repercussions of today could be dealt with later; right now, only one thing was important. “Come on, let's get you back to Mommy before your uncle winds up in the trunk of her car.”

Jimmy, it doesn't matter how cute the girl was, you are toast.

Welcome back Queenie.


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Oh, that was so cute and sweet! Poor little Jon!


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Loved it! And the bit about the trunk? Perfect.

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Hi Mary,

Once more onto the b(r)each!
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All I Want
Some peace and quiet given the lil’ one needing lots of attention? Of course, Clark wouldn’t. Not really. And Lois? Well, she’d feel guilty while wanting it.

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Jon shrank further into his coat, pulling the hood down over his eyes to block out some of the chaos.
Ohh. That’s a good premise!

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“You really don't want to see Santa?” Uncle Jimmy still sounded unconvinced.
“You really don’t want to see what’s past the event horizon?” The co-pilot wasn’t convinced at all.

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, red rope that separated the “line” from the rest of excited mob.
“line” in quotes. clap

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His hood was tugged back, and the bright afternoon sunlight flooded into his eyes.
Oh, he needs eyewear, too. And a mood-hood. The first 6 y/o goth child laugh

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How’s he going to know what to bring you?”

“Superman,” Jon replied.
Because Superman will tell Santa? They’re old drinking buddies. Or does Jon want Superman for Christmas because he figured out his Mom had an affair and he wants his real daddy?

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The elf's smile brightened. “Why, you're very welcome!” She grinned up at Uncle Jimmy. “He's so adorable! How old is he?”
The “single guy with child = girl bait” trope?

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Jon looked up in time to glimpse of a streak of red and blue just before it disappeared. With a gasp, he ducked under the rope and ran in the direction the superhero had gone.
Oh dear.

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The resulting drain meant that his heat-vision took longer to reach the temperature needed to weld the beams back into place,
He needs to get out more, into the sun. Maybe spend an hour in the upper atmosphere, naked, hoping that neither a U2 or the ISS fly by.

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Jon's lower lip trembled. “Please turn back into my daddy.”
Oh boy.

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“I'll give you chocolate,” he offered,
That only works with Ultra Woman.

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but based on the whispering that had begun to ripple, the horse had already left the barn.
Oh boy. And you know, catching up on all these stories, there is quite a thematic line going. Clark sees a 2 y/o boy in danger and then let’s his guard down with the mother. Now, he is overly familiar with a little boy who calls him daddy. Your are on quite the roll, indeed!

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“I want to, really; but a lot of people need my help right now.” “But...why?” asked Jon.
Because they bought so many presents that their apartment buildings collapsed from the additional weight.

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The thought that these incidents might all be connected suddenly occurred to Clark.
LOIS: What does he think I’ve been writing about for the past five days? I will expose those criminals who took my family from me during Christmas mad

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I think a lot of people are going to be asking that very question, now.”
Hey, this could be a great way to depower Superman. Just overwork him during the darkest time of the year!

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“Come on, let's get you back to Mommy before your uncle winds up in the trunk of her car.”
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What a sad little fun piece! Or is this ‘funny sad little piece’?

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