Hi Morgana!
Slowly reading the final version and happy to see it posted!
The soothing beams of moonlight that caress each and every object of nature
This is such poetic prose!
...refusing to acknowledge those bright emissaries of night.
I love this phrasing, too!
She was the embodiment of all he hoped for in life.
So sweet!
But stronger than this was the tug to be among his own people, to know them, and most important of all, to help his parent’s people in their hour of greatest need. This final point made that pull irresistible.
This is a great set-up for all that's to come, and I feel like it really delves into the pro/con of it. It felt like we didn't get quite so much reasoning as why he'd actually WANT to go on the show.
As he became a better writer and journalist, he pushed her to be better, not only as a journalist, but as a person.
This is great character work! Love the way you're highlighting their progression.
Sure, his reason for leaving was noble, but she didn’t have to like it.
This really sounds like Lois!
They clung to one another, knowing this was the last night on Earth for him.
Such a weightily tinged description!
He stepped forward, took her in his arms and said, “Ready to make some more memories?”
She gifted him with a brilliant smile, “With you? Always.”
Awww!
