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Okay, I realise that this fic was hardly unique and that it presented nothing new. So, I have to explain why I wrote it.

As many of you know, when I first started writing in the L&C fanfiction world, I had jotted down several story ideas that I had wanted to explore. Over the years I have written stories covering all those ideas.

Still, there was one idea, which I had never written down, but still had entertained in my mind which I had never written. I think because it was too much like a ToGOM situation that I never actually wrote it.

Now, I'm somewhat of a completist, so I thought... 'what the heck'. On a whim, I recently wrote it out.

That is the story presented here.

As I said, I realise no new ground has been broken here, but I hope some of the gentle readers can enjoy it.

Tank (who is still, occasionally, keeping his hand in the fandom)

Lovely! I liked how Lois declared her affection for Clark as a friend before she learned about his secret. Clark won't really have any doubt that she wants him as Clark. And once again, of course, we see why she's so essential to the whole equation.

I also really liked the reason Clark gave her for not telling her the secret. Because he's right. It would be absolutely necessary, but very, very difficult, to keep a secret like that. What he said about doing it all his life and still slipping up - for someone else, how much harder would that be?

You know, I never thought of it that way, but that's actually a pretty good reason for a haircut.

~Toc

I liked this story a lot

I initially thought that Lois took a little too calmly the revelation - so early in the relationship, one would expect her to get mad. Otoh, she had already realized how deep her feelings ran, so everything makes sense.

And lol at the haircut comment!

All in all, a nice story. Good to see your writing again

See ya,
AnnaBtG.

Very good to see you post a story, Tank!

Lovely!!!

Well, Lois thinks she has killed Clark here. Thankfully, she hasn't, so I was able to appreciate how you showed us her feelings. At first, she was simply in shock. But what I just quoted here really shook me, even though I knew that Clark wasn't dead. Just imagine how Lois would feel when she realized she would have to tell Perry, and still worse, Jonathan and Martha, that Clark was dead, and that she had accidentally caused it. My mind boggles at the horror of it.

Poor, poor Lois. "Dead" Clark is showing himself to her, and she would really have to think she was going mad. But then she started to believe her eyes after all:
Beautiful paragraph, Tank. I so like Lois's love for Clark - oh, she loves him all right, even if she hasn't admitted it yet - and then I love how the smart reporter raises her head again, asking the right question.

I love this! I love it when Lois is smart and is able to figure things out on her own.

Unlike Janet, I don't entirely believe that Clark kept his secret from Lois just to protect her. I think he was scared of her reaction at his deceit, too. Still, I agree that it makes sense that he would want to protect her, too. He is this overprotective sort of guy, after all! I'm glad that Lois wasn't angry at him. But I very much applaud her conclusion that Clark had been wrong to keep his secret from her:
Yes, yes, yes! Clark should have realized that Lois deserved to know and that the secret wouldn't be too much of a burden to her at all. I really think he should have trusted Lois and her ability to keep a secret of such a magnitude. But luckily, Lois isn't angry at him:
Beautiful, Tank. Lovely!

But all is not well:
The cruelty and irony of this, seeing that Lois used to prefer Superman over Clark... Tank, it's brilliant.

But the really brilliant one is Lois, however. She is the one who knows how to bring *Clark' back.
Of course there were branches and ledges! And so Clark survived, thanks to Lois!

Brilliant, Tank! I really, really like it. Hey, you don't happen to have any other unfinished LnC stories floating around in your personal cyberspace that you could finish and post here? Eh... except for the Tank ending ones, I think I can do without them. But, hey, I think you still owe us at least one more haircut story. You half-started one here, why not finish it?

Ann

Ohh, ouch, that burns!

Thanks Tank, that was a great little piece. I enjoyed it a lot

Helga

Nice job Tank. Laura

Yet another reason that Lois needs a haircut! At least Clark came clean with Lois within hours of his "death" rather than days or weeks or months or years (arghh...always so frustrating!). Thanks for the little adventure!

Tank, this was lovely! I'm so so so glad you followed that whim and wrote this story out.

I have to echo Ann's earlier sentiment — I love how Lois "saved" Clark here, thinking of a plausible cover story so he could survive.

Thanks for sharing this on the boards!

Ouch! Magma! Considering Clark's clothes didn't survive when he fell through the atmosphere I doubt they would have survived magma. That would have been an interesting angle.

Great story, Tank. I'm glad everybody lived and that you didn't have Lois fall into the magma instead of Clark. Oh, no, another Tank ending... Sorry, I just couldn't resist....

Hey, Ann, why don't you write one about the haircut? I'm sure it would be great!

Thanks all for the nice words.

I've been around, but too involved the last several months. The job is especially nasty right now and there is no light at the end of the tunnel presently. I'm thinking that the tunnel has become a well.

And, no, Ann, I don't have any other fic ideas currently lanquishing on my hardrive.

Thanks again.

Tank (who does recall that one little idea called 'Luthor's Revenge' but will assume that doesn't count)

Nice job, Tank! I really like it.

Jackie

I haven't had time to read much lately, but when I saw you posted something, I just had to look. It's so great to see something from you again, Tank! And it doesn't really matter that it's "nothing new"--your take on it is as well-done as ever.

Swallowed by molten lava? Declared dead to the world? Lucky for Lois and Clark, there was a way to get out of the pickle yet again, and his name was Tank.

Thanks for the fun

Tank! I can't tell you how much I LOVED this story...

And what the heck do you mean "not unique" "nothing new". Are you insane? Geez. I wish I had a little "nothing new" like this stashed away on my computer some where.

Okay but on with the fdk. Your protrayal of Lois & Clark is seamless. I can always *see* the characters so well in my mind through your writing.

And oh how I loved this part, classic Tank:

Should have known you'd at least get a reference to a haircut in there. And no one understands Lois' feelings here better than me. My husband has a Jeep and that's one of the reasons I cut my hair off short this summer - for our adventure trips in it. Convertibles really don't agree with longer hair.

Okay, and I love this whole paragraph...

But I also feel a little guilty over it too, because I wrote the same kind of a premise in a story that is being beta'd right now. I promise that I hadn't read your story first, and mine is definitly written differently, however it's based on the same idea... trust. But I loved being on the same wavelength with you.

Anyway, if you have any more of these "long lost ideas" floating around on your PC, please, please, post them.

Thanks Tank!

-- MR