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Great story!!

Thanks Classicalla! Glad to see you're still following it on both threads.

I'm reading this one, too. I like the first person present tense viewpoint, both because it feels so immediate and because I don't do it well. I guess I'm a little jealous!

I also really like the way you're bringing in Lois's novel as a plot device. At this point, it reads like she's subconsiously (or maybe deliberately) mirroring her own life in the relationships in her book. I also like the way you're using Mayson, and how Lois seems to be moving from disgust to impatient toleration of her (probably just in time to cry real tears at Mayson's funeral).

Do keep it up! It's cute, funny, a little sexy, and very tightly written. I look forward to the last two chapters (assuming you don't find a reason to stretch it out a bit).

Thanks Terry! I really appreciate the fdk.

You can blame Sue S. for the first person pov. I beta read for her and vice versa. She was always writing in first person and made it look so fun.

Like you said first person is so immediate and intimate. I decided to give it a try and had her wonderful beta work to help me. Once I did it I was hooked. This is my second story from Lois's pov. I have another story in the works from Clark's pov. We'll see how that one goes.

Yep, remember the story description at the beginning...

Cute, funny, sexy... wow! Thanks for the compliments! Yeah, I'll be posting the next part soon. Still have a couple of things to iron out.

Love it.

Love love love it.

Did I mention I love it?

Seriously, I'm pretty much at a loss for coherent feedback — when Clark asked Lois to get the Kryptonite away from him, my heart was in my throat. I was waiting for Lois' angry reaction ...

... but instead, she forced herself to push it back because Clark was obviously hurting from the exposure.

*loves* Post again soon. Please?

angelic_editor -

At a loss for coherent fdk? Really? WOW!

You might still see *angry* Lois - we'll see.

I will post just as soon as I hear back from my beta. I sent her a couple of changes... I just want to see what she thinks.

Thanks for the fdk! I'm glad you *love love love* it.