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Ahh... Twists and turns abound in part 27, eh?

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Wow. I got a little lost for a while. I had to read it twice to undersand everything that happened. I'm not very good at understand science-fiction right away...

I like when you go, but why do I have the feeling that, if all that happened, it's because the twins sons of Zara and the twin daughters of Clark are meant for each other?

ooooh, my head. *lol* I'll read this part again when I'm off the meds, I think. I liked it, I think it's great that we get to find out what happened on NEw Krypton I'm just all confused with the T5 now. LOL! I'll read this again a lil later and give you proper feedback

Yes, I, too, got a little lost, Nancy. Okay, this is what I *think* happened:

Clark, Zared and Jon are all sent to Krypton by their T5 thingies. On Krypton, Clark is told that Trey actually extracted some sperm from him - without Clark's knowledge or permission, by the way - and used this sperm to impregnate Zara, who later gave birth to Zared. Trey thought it was necessary for Clark and Zara to have a child together, since she was meant to be the ruler of Krypton and she is his birth wife. (Gaah. Am I right so far?)

However, while Zared was still just a baby, he made it known to the Kryptonian Council (or was it just to Trey? Or to Zara and Ching?) that he, Zared, needed to be with his father, Clark, on the Earth. So the reason why Jon, at least, is on Krypton is to bring his older brother home - except his older brother is, for the moment at least, his baby brother....

So Jon brings Zared to the Earth and leaves him with Lois and Clark in the past, so that he can grow up. Then Jon returns to the present, where he is greeted by his brother, who is once again his older brother... who is about to get married, by the way!

Wow! Complicated, Nancy. Okay - we needed to find out this about Zared's background. (Though I don't see why it would have endangered Zared's existence on the Earth if he, or the rest of the Kent children, had been allowed to meet their mother again, when she visited Clark to hand over the T5 device.)

Like I said, we needed to find out about this. Are you done with Krypton now, though, or will you bring it back? Anyway, whether you will or not, I'm eager to get back to the "flow" of your story and to see Zared and Jenni get married, for example.

Ann

Okay, so this was an experiment of incorporating another story into this one. It was the story of how Zared got to Earth.

Arrggghhh.... I see you all missed the secret that Clark had been thinking about and wanting to share with his family. The one he shared with Lois after several years and that she got upset about it. It's here in the last line:

I changed the interaction between Clark and Zara just a little so I could do this line and hopefully it would be a WOW!, but I see it didn't work. I'll definitely have to work on this part. I wondered if I was jumping around too much. The twins are not Zared's half brothers. They are his whole brothers and half brothers to the rest of the Kent brood.

Okay, Poussin, this can't happen:

It is a lovely, lovely thought, though.


Yes, Trey impregnated Zara with Clark's sperm - without either of their permission. Since he wanted to be *sure* he implanted two embryos (I left that part mysterious.) one of which split into identical twins. The twins and Zared were triplets! If there had only been one, then there wouldn't have been the peace that I spoke of. Zared is not the 'heir'.

Zared only made it known to Zara that he was to be with his father. To assure that she understood this, he simply ceased to be seen by anyone else but Trey and Zara. Mike, the angel, helped with that.

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No, Jon and Zared went back in the past to Metropolis. Jon waited on the roof to receive his baby brother to take him to the townhouse. Jon never went to New Krypton. After he received the baby Zared and put him in the townhouse, he went back to the present and arrived at the same time as the two young men and Zared.

The Clark that existed when Zared was about two went to New Krypton to get Zared. When he gave Zared to Jon, he went back to his own time.

When Zared disappeared from the roof, he as thrown back into the present and was in the present when he went to New Krypton. He went to New Krypton to bring his brothers to visit Earth.

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Okay, I never said this. I said that if Jon told Zared about this too soon it could endanger his existence. Remember that T-5 that Clark still has?

Yes, I'm done with the New Krypton thing for the most part, but I'm at least going to have to change this part around to make it more clear. I'll work on that and let you know when I've fixed it.

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Here's the conversation between Zara and Clark as it originally existed: (Maybe it will help, but it needs some work, too.)

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Sorry, it was all so confusing. How about if I date the sections with years. Would that help?

Yes, if you date the sections, I think that will make it clearer, Nancy.

Ann

Thanks, Ann, I'll work on that.

I wonder if anyone noticed the last line at all, and if you realized what it meant?

Hi,

Wow! Great part.

Well, now, I sure hope NOT!

And Geez! I wonder if Clark was thinking about having 9 children one day when he wanted a family at the end of season 4... lol

Yes, and will it stop at nine, Nancy? What about Clark and Caitlyn?

Ann

I haven't decided Ann. Clark would be very skittish about having more children because of what happened to Lois.

Well I hope Caitlyn convinces him....

Ok... some actual real feedback not that the cloud of meds has lifted from my brain.

This I know is from part 26, but I gotta say:
Oh thank goodness!! He needs to stay with Jenni!!!

ok.. I have to ask. cause even without meds, I'm not getting this at all. He gets it out of hyperspace? like what, he reaches his arm into some alternate space or something? I'm real confused. ...what's hyperspace, in fact? I always thought that was just the speed the Millenium Falcon travelled at. LOL!

Hehehe! He's only in trouble if he finds himself on the one with the registry number NX-01. On any of the ones registered NCC-1701 (A through... God knows!), he's fine. On some of them, there's even a guy who's a dead ringer for millionaire Tim Lake. ...sorry, could not resist. Die hard Trekkie, right here.

AHHHH! Just when I thought I actually understood where this was all going, I'm all lost again.

waiiiiit! this is mean! we don't get the explanation? I hope we do later!!!!

nicely put! somewhen. I like that. I might even use it eventually.

ok... wait.... they're starting to come out of the woodwork now! LOL! He's got more kids than that couple of rabbits that live out in my backyard. hehehe!

Can't wait to find out what comes next!!!

Yes, they are his kids, but he never, ever thought he was going to see these two ever again.

I'm going to work on the last chapter and try to make it easier to understand. Thus far RL and computer problems have put a ringer in that... I'm going to put the explanation for this: <Oh, didn't I explain that. You see, I wanted to make sure, so I...> I didn't put it in to begin with because I wanted the twins to be a surprise, but I don't think it worked the way I'd planned. The explanation is that Trey implanted two embryos to ensure implantation. Both of them implanted and one split into twins.

Yes, I'm a Trek fan, too, so I couldn't resist the Enterprise bit.


Each person needs their own T-5. That's why there was three of them. Of course Clark still has one out there yet that has yet to speak to him.
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Maria...

Mike, the angel, was the one that was directing or causing the events to happen. Clark, Zared, and Jon were just the players to make what was supposed to be happen.



Yes, they are.


Yes. I did this because I had already established that it was best not to come into contact with another version of yourself. I also wanted to include Jon. Originally, Clark put Zared in the bassinette.


Writer's perogative mostly, but the T-5 didn't give her one of itself. (Or Mike didn't do it.)

Don't worry, she will get to visit Zared later.

(And going along with that... Ann, I never said that Lois couldn't see her kids - only that she wasn't supposed to see Jon at the time she saw Clark at the hospital.)


Since it's a time loop, it's hard to say where it started since the T-5 is self-replicating. Mike was the one that started the whole thing though. Mike is a guardian angel for those of you who don't remember.


And, yes, Lara, I imagine that Caitlyn and Clark will have at least one kid (much to Ann's chagrin).

Finally, I'm going to go back and put dates in, but for the most part, I'm just going on to the next part before I really fix part 27. If I don't do that, then it's going to be a while before part 28 would get posted, and everyone is waiting for a wedding! Eh?

Hi Classicalla,


Yes, they are.


It's a good thing Lois is dead! :rolleyes:

Zara never had children with Ching?


MAF