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#34280 11/14/06 01:09 PM
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Great start! hyper


More ASAP, please.

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Barbara, I'm sorry to probably disappoint you, when you check this out to see what I have written and find that it hasn't got very much to do with your story at all. I ned you to understand that I'm feeling increasingly exhausted and increasingly unable to formulate long and interesting feedback. Also, things are just getting ever more stressful at school, where I work as a teacher. So please forgive me for just saying this: I'm so glad that you are back with your story about Clark and Becca. However, since this part did not have any Lois and Clark interaction (which is honestly what I'm here for anyway) this feels more like a preface, a setting of the stage, for what is about to come. I'm glad, very glad, that the play has started. Please forgive me for not saying more this time.

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Of course there's not much interaction between our favorite couple yet. Clark still hasn't got the job and Lois wasn't introduced to him officially.

But that will happen! I promise!!

When this idea of Clark being a single parent crossed my mind, I thought that this was completely impossible to write. But I got hooked and started to wonder what problems he would have to face.

Could he become Superman?

How would Lois react? Being the Lois that she is. She doesn't seem to be keen on kids almost the whole series through.

And first and foremost: How could Clark possibly become a single parent, assuming that he still sticks to the myth. And I strongly believe in Lois being his first and only love. This might be ridiculous regarding real life, but this is a story and I think that all kind of romantic nonsense is allowed!!! wink

I want to prove that nothing's impossible and that this can work. I hope you'll enjoy my effort!


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And first and foremost: How could Clark possibly become a single parent, assuming that he still sticks to the myth. And I strongly believe in Lois being his first and only love. This might be ridiculous regarding real life, but this is a story and I think that all kind of romantic nonsense is allowed!!! [Wink]
I thought it was pretty well established in the first section of the series, Clark was fulfilling a promise he made to Becca's mother, not that he was the natural father. In this context, Clark choosing this course would be a logical and romantic thing. For that matter, even if he were the father, the mother is dead.

As for Lois - well, I know that men with young children rate high in the attractiveness market. Just go to a park and watch the women ogling the good-lookin' guys with the little ones. (Hell, many moons ago I chasing 'em away from my hubby every time he went for a walk with our baby - they didn't even care that I was standing there!)

Lois may say she doesn't care - but once she sees him with a well cared for little one, her problem will be jealousy. hyper


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#34284 11/15/06 07:15 PM
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When this idea of Clark being a single parent crossed my mind, I thought that this was completely impossible to write.
Not impossible, Barbara!! Here's a very good story that illustrates that: Duet by Shayne Terry. It was nominated for a Kerth.
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I want to prove that nothing's impossible and that this can work. I hope you'll enjoy my effort!
Go for it!
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Lois may say she doesn't care - but once she sees him with a well cared for little one, her problem will be jealousy.
Haha...
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I like the idea of this story, Barbara, but I have to tell you that I didn't like the additions you put in with the lady at the theatre. Maybe it's because I just thought that the original was so beautiful the way it was. I also liked that the lady (Beatrice) was just a tad confused. Of course, this is your story, but as you know, I'm not one to keep my mouth shut.

This is from the pilot episode as per Sarah Wood's interpretation from hers and Pam's site (It's slightly different from the script.):

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Clark took a quick look around him, but no one was paying
attention to him with all the ruckus going on. He lowered his
glasses and looked over the top of them, at the brick wall of the
decrepit theater... then looked right through it. A woman stood on
the stage, a feather boa around her neck and an enormous floppy
hat on her head, surrounded by debris: fallen-down columns, empty
seats, old props and racks of costumes all over the stage.

"After the dark death of autumn, and the cold barren winter,
how I wish this rock might be taken from my heart," she cried out,
her voice strong and clear, echoing slightly in the cavernous
interior.

"Okay, Bill, start her up!" a loud voice shouted near Clark,
distracting him. He saw that the construction workers were ready
to begin razing the theater now. He glanced around again, then
stared intently at the machine, his glasses once again lowered. He
looked through the outer casing to the motor, and just as it
started he used his heat vision to burn through some of the
wiring, short circuiting it. The protesters cheered madly when the
engine failed, although it was only a brief respite from the
inevitable.

Taking advantage of the confusion, Clark adjusted his glasses
and slipped inside the old theater.

The woman on the stage didn't see him at first, and he
watched for a moment, listening to the heartfelt passion in her
voice. "Oh, for the days of my childhood, back when my soul was
pure. I slept right here in this nursery, looking out at the
orchard from this very room, and every morning I awoke with such
joy in my heart. My orchard is just the same as it was then. No-
thing is different. All of it, all of it, dressed in white. My
lovely orchard."

Clark felt it only right to applaud the actress, his claps
echoing strangely and drawing her attention as he had meant to.

"Who's there?"

"Just... a fan."

"I'm not leaving," she told him. "Not until I finish."

He grinned. "All right. Do you mind if I watch? I always
loved this play."

"You know it?" she asked.

"The Cherry Orchard. Anton Chekhov."

She looked pleased that he knew it, that she could share her
passion with someone who appreciated it. "His finest, don't you
think?"

"Definitely," he agreed with a gentle half-smile.

She smiled back at him wistfully. "They don't understand.
Theater is more than bricks and mortar." She looked around the
cavernous hall, seeing more than old age and decay. "It's drama
and passion, and mystery and comedy and life!" She looked at him
yearningly. "Don't make me go. I'm not ready."

"We have some time," he assured her.

"You understand. I just want to say good-bye."

Clark knew that he'd found an angle for his piece. He watched
and listened as she lifted her face to the back row again.

"...all of it dressed in white. My lovely orchard."

Later, back in his hotel room, Clark gathered together his
research and the notes he had taken in his interview with Bea-
trice, the actress at the theater, and sat down at his laptop. He
typed away rapidly, fingers flying over the keys as the words
poured out of him. The poor machine struggled valiantly to keep up
with him, but it wasn't long before it began beeping pathetically,
issuing smoke. Impatiently he fanned at it with his jacket.

When he was finished, Clark read over his piece, feeling a
deep satisfaction. "Beatrice was eighteen when she made her debut.
Warren G. Harding was President, the Unknown Soldier was interred
at Arlington, and Babe Ruth was sold to the Yankees..."
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And the script adds this bit:

It was a different era, a time of
promise and renewal. Beatrice was
filled with all those emotions and
more when she stepped onto the
Sarah Bernhardt stage for the first
time...
A little later, Perry finished reading it in his office, his
southern accent caressing the final words. "... She came to say
good-bye, as we all must, to the past, and to a life and a place
that soon would exist only in a bittersweet memory." He smiled
broadly at Clark.
I'd like to see more of Becca, too. Is her nickname Rebecca or Becky? You used both.

More soon, please.


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Her christian name is Rebecca. Clark uses the short form Becca, because I think it's more suitable as long as she is a child. (The main character of my favorite novel is called Bekka by her husband. I like the name. wink )

And sometimes Clark uses Becky as her nickname. And of course he uses pumpkin and honey. I'm not very consistent in nicknames because my mother used so much for me....Muckel, Maus, Mausbiber, Bärchen, Mausebär...The list is endless and I can't translate them ( or won't do it).


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I like the idea of this story, Barbara, but I have to tell you that I didn't like the additions you put in with the lady at the theatre. Maybe it's because I just thought that the original was so beautiful the way it was. I also liked that the lady (Beatrice) was just a tad confused. Of course, this is your story, but as you know, I'm not one to keep my mouth shut.
To be honest, I didn't remember too much of the original scene in the Pilot. I didn't watch this episode when LnC was on tv the last time. So I haven't seen this scene for several years now. And I don't want to copy everything from the original series. Of course Secret Fears and this part were close to the actual Pilot with Clark being rejected by Perry and then trying to get the job with writing this article about the theatre. Maybe I shouldn't have used this, but it offered me to write Secret Fears the way I wrote it. You could imagine how it would go on and therefore it wasn't that much of a cliffhanger.

I don't expect you to like everything I've written and I it's impossible to please everyone. huh

I'll see how fast I can be with posting, because there is a test waiting for me next Friday and another short before Christmas. thud


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I don't expect you to like everything I've written and I it's impossible to please everyone
Well, no, of course not. I wasn't criticizing. I was just telling you what I thought. (As you know I'm good for doing.)


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