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Thanks for reading, everyone. All comments welcome.

Rac

Hi,

Great part!


Finally find out!

I'm beginning to wonder if you are planning to rival Lord of the Rings, or War and Peace.

Every time it looks like you are getting close to a resolution that brings Clark back to earth you introduce more 'complications' that will keep him on that unredeemable rock called New Krypton.

Tank (who still enjoys it when Lois tells the self-righteous politicos to stuff it)

It is interesting that I finally noticed the true emotional toll of everything on Lois. She has been such a stoic character for so long, and to see her lose it little by little is heartbreaking.

The trials that you are putting Clark though, gosh...it is going to be one looong healing process back on Earth for him. If he ever goes back...

The only thing I would like to see is a little more Martha and Jonathan scenes. The ones you have of them alone are so good and show the widespread effects of Clark's absence.

Jon is still there too right? Miss the little guy...

More soon!

~Lois Lane Wanna Be

Belatedly, Rac, here is some feedback.

I absolutely love the way Dalton is explaining to Lois why she should accept the Nobel Peace Prize.

And this, too, is beautiful - such wonderful characterization, and so witty.

Lok Sim is on Rae Et's trail! Yes!!!

Poor Talan. She did not want her brother to realize that she is in love with Clark.

I wonder if Serick thinks that Talan should "go for it"? Will he put pressure on her to give in to her love for Clark?

Well said.

This was so beautiful and hopeful.

This emphasizes so poignantly how intolerable a trial can be for the victim. He or she has to relive his or her own degradation, humiliation and pain. And maybe, at the end of the trial, the judge or the jury will declare that, no, sorry, you haven't convinced us that your suffering wasn't self-inflicted, and you haven't convinced us that the person accused of causing you pain deserves to be punished. Being told that, after reliving your own utter humiliation, must feel like having the last vestiges of human dignity ripped from you.

I love Clark's answer to Enza.

This is a beautifully written part, as always. (However, I, too, am beginning to long for the time when Clark can return to Lois.)

Ann

Still reading.

Still feeling concern for Lois. Things aren't getting any better for her, are they?

I like Serick - his pride in his family provided a nice moment. And his obvious concern for Talan , too. He understands his sister well, can read her, without her having to say the words. And Talan takes the first steps to confide in her brother. She can't yet fully talk about all that she feels with him, not just her obsession with Clark but also how scary she's found her emotional isolation, but hopefully that will come. You've shown us the bond between brother and sister, a potential bridge for Talan to unburden herself. There was both a gentle teasing and genuine affection in what he said to her.

Ann suggested that Serick might encourage Talan to make a move on Clark. But I didn't see that - he appears to be a man committed to his family and such a suggestion would seem antithetical to what he is.

Although this could be interpreted that way:
That makes is sound like Serick's okay with the idea of a man cheating on his wife - so maybe Serick's commitment to his family is a facade? But, hopefully, he was just teasing her:)

Also liked Clark's interviews at the end. Also like seeing Clark recovering. Right now, he appears to be in better shape than Lois.

Am really wanting to see Clark back home with Lois.

c.

Hi everyone,

I just wanted to say a quick thanks for commenting and let you know that I'm not ignoring the comments or the story. I'm recovering from eye surgery and it'll be a little while before I can spend any extended period of time with the computer. I will reply to your very thoughtful feedback, but I ask your indulgence for a few extra days.

Many thanks,

Rac

Good heavens, yes, of course We can wait. Hope that eye heals well, and don't go doing things that risk eye strain, Rac.

carol

Get well soon, Rac! We'll be waiting for you to recover.

Ann

Absolutely, Rac, yes, take care of those eyes! SF author Barry Longyear ("Enemy Mine," "Sea of Glass," "It Came From Schenechtady") has recently written (after surgery on that portion of his anatomy) that the most important part of a writer's body is his or her posterior, because of the long stretches spent sitting in front of the computer/typewriter/writing desk. But the eyes are right up there in importance! How else could you read and respond so intelligently to our many and various feedback postings?

Take all the time you need. I know the wait will be worth it.

Hi everyone,

Thanks for your patience and your kind words. The vision in my right eye is excellent and the left eye is getting there, so I was back to work as usual today.

Of course, thank you for the wonderful comments.

Maria, I'm glad you enjoyed this part. More is coming up soon.

Hi Tank. Thanks for your comments. I also like it when Lois tells the spineless politicians to stuff a sock in it. She does righteous indignation better than just about anyone. And I don't think this will be as long as War and Peace, but I do think it's the longest story in Lois and Clark fanfic (but I'm not putting any bets on it).

LLWB, thanks for the feedback. The last few years have definitely taken their toll on Lois. Without Clark around, she's internalized things an awful lot, and that can't be good for anyone, even someone as strong as she is. Martha, Jonathan, and Jon, are indeed, still around, and will be back in upcoming parts (it's hard to juggle all these characters!)

Hi, Ann. I like writing Dalton a lot. He might be on the side of the angels, but he isn't a naive idealist and he's definitely sarcastic. I think he makes a good foil for Ultrawoman since she doesn't really have to worry about hurting his feelings.

You're right that Talan didn't want her brother to know about her feelings for Clark, but I don't think his teasing or its implications are necessarily nefarious. Serick has demonstrated that he teases his sister pretty mercilessly, since no one else on the entire planet would dare to do so. I think, given his own commitment to his family, he respects Kal El's love for his wife, even if it means unhappiness for his sister.

Lancine is another incredibly minor character I really like using in this story. Unlike Dalton, he actually is pretty much a saint. And while Ultrawoman often needs a tough guy in her corner, she also needs to have a great idealist on her side.

Finally, I totally agree that a trial can be like reliving traumatic events for the victim. I've prepared several clients for trial who have been through terrible ordeals, often as the victims of domestic violence or persecution and torture in their native countries. I find it emotionally exhausting and I'm just the lawyer. I know that I can't begin to imagine how bad it is for them.

Hi Carol, thanks for your comments. I agree that Serick is very dedicated to his family. With respect to the line you quoted, I can see how it can be interpreted that way, but hopefully, Serick's future actions and words will demonstrate his true beliefs. As for his comment about Talan being noble, I think about it in the context of his previous comment to Talan - that he was sorry that Kal El was married. She didn't even take the opportunity to commiserate. She wouldn't show one moment of jealousy toward Lois and that makes her pretty damn noble, if not a downright saint.

Thanks again for your comments, everyone. More is on the way!

Regards,

Rac