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Well, thanks, guys, for the opinions.

You're right, Gerry. I absolutely need to see Lois and Clark together at the end. It lets me know that all is right in the universe .

I think my favorite satirical bit is the comparision of these two passages:

And this one:

Portraying Lex as the one who is able to forgive and Clark as the one who is unforgiving .

On the other hand, Kelly as the perfect woman is a satire, too. Still, we all know her - the woman whose personality changes when she's trying to snag a husband. And we sit back and look at her poor target and say, "He has no idea what he's getting himself into." (Or is that just me )

However, Kelly is that woman in the extreme. The woman who says 'H-E double toothpicks' is the woman who is slowly poisoning him with kryptonite. To me, that's satire.

ML

Following is my personal opinion, and should not be taken as anything more than that.

I think the story stands on its own without the original epilogue. The altered one actually works better for me, since it allows a version of Lois to survive losing Clark forever and still find a large measure of happiness in life. When you send it to the archive, I strongly suggest using the second epilogue, or you can consider using the slight edit I have made in the last portion.

There. Doesn't that look even more interesting?

LOL, Terry. But that, of course, misses the point of ML's story.

c.

I'm gonna throw my 2 cents in here. I read this story last night immediately after it was posted and let it digest overnight. I've read all the comments. Isn't this the way they ended "Dallas" with Bobby in the shower? And the Bob Newhart show (he woke with Suzanne Pleshette in bed with him instead of the woman that was his wife in the series - where they owned the B & B).

These types of stories take our imagination to a new level and then yank us back to the status quo - (i.e., it never really happened, but "what if" it had?)

Even though you told us that we could scroll down to the end to see the (implied) surprise ending, I didn't. I really bought into that you were going to kill off Clark and Lois was going to bring up his kids, only 1 of which was really his. And the irony - that the other child was fathered by Lois' deceased husband - was great.

I was half expecting that H.G. Wells would pop up and offer Lois a chance to go back in time to save Clark...

perhaps he could still show up and bring her to a world where Clark still exists and lost his Lois? (like Alt-Clark, where Lois was lost in the Congo)....

Anyway, I totally appreciate your wanting a happy ending....and in this world where true love seems to be a losing proposition for many, I love the idea that Lois and Clark are destined to have that type of love that transends time and space....

So...after all that...ML, you're the author. Feedback is good, but ultimately you make the decision. Either way, we'll always read what you write!! That's a promise!

I'm just getting started, but I wanted to comment on this one right away.

Why is it with all the Lois Luthor stories I've ever read, you're the first one who's ever thought of this? It never crossed my mind, that's for sure.

Also, that's the best back-story for why Lois would marry Lex that I've ever met.

I'll add more as I read more.

Elisabeth

Love the alternative, Terry . Don't suspect I'll use it (even if part of me has to admit I'm tempted ). But thanks for the laugh.

And thanks for the comments, Chris. I realize that it's my decision, but I'm really not sure what I'm going to do.

At this point, I'm not even entirely certain I'm going to send it to the archives. So at least for now, anyone who wants no epilogue should just ignore the one provided. Anyone who wants my original epilogue should use it. And anyone who likes my revised epilogue should just use that (How's that for diplomatic ).

Me, I need my Lois and Clark. My universe tilts over funny when something happens to them .

ML

Hey ML,

That certainly was interesting. I'm glad that CJ was "super" and that Lois found happiness. But I suppose I liked it even better when Clark woke up from his nightmare!

Thanks for sharing your imagination with us!
Write on!
Anne

ML, whatever you do, you must upload this to the Archive!!!!!

Ann

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I do agree, I like seeing them together. One of the reasons why I hardly ever watch Smallville anymore, and only watched SR twice.

But the story was so strong, and it worked. It left one with a sense of the whole. But I do like the 2nd epilogue.


Patrick

If this was meant as satire, I obviously read it wrong. I skipped the warnings on the top, so I wasn't expecting anything in particular; maybe that would have clued me in. There was irony in spades, but I still don't see it as satire. It seemed a lot more like a tragedy to me.

Oh, well.

PJ

First, didn't Carol already say in the Clark Moves on Thread in the fanfic related forum that she'd made a mistake about your quote, Cassandra? I don't think you have anything to worry about there.

I didn't write this story because of any one fic. I wrote it because after reading the thread in the fanfic related forum, I got the impression that there had been a spade of Clark moves on fics (unless I misunderstood - which, knowing me is entirely possible ). I wrote it because, as you might recall, I made a certain threat to correct the imbalance ). In fact, I think the last Clark moves on fic that I read was Butterfly Legacy (years ago). And in that one, Clark goes back to Lois in the end. I wrote it to correct what I saw as an imbalance. If there is no imbalance and there really is only one story out there where Clark moves on, then I was under a misimpression .

Oh well. If there is only one Clark moves on fic, then I guess one Lois moves on fic sets things back in order

Don't worry too much about it, Pam. As I told Carol yesterday, I think my satire suffers in translation. I'm much more satirical in person .

ML

It’s Classicalla. Yes, she did. I did say I was initially ‘blamed’ for the quote.

Well, you know at the time, I thought so, too, but now that I rethink that, I’m not so sure. I can only really think of two. But that doesn’t mean anything.

I was referring specifically to the fic which had feedback in it that started the whole moving on thread.

Anyway, this was a great fic.

I enjoyed this. I was suspicious of Kelly almost from the start, but I think it's just because I really don't want to see Clark with anyone but Lois. But I never suspected all sorts of hidden agendas and feelings on her part - everything with Lex and Trask took me completely by surprise.

And the fact that it was too late to save Clark. I wasn't expecting that either! I was sure that even though it was horrifically close, that the kryptonite wouldn't quite kill him.

I think I would personally prefer the story without the epilogue, but I understand perfectly your need for one. And for me your epilogue rewrite works better than the first one, so I hope you will include it as an option if you post it to the Archives.

Since I'm not up-to-date on my reading, I haven't seen a spate of "Clark and/or Lois moving on" stories recently, but perhaps some have slipped by me. Of course, two or three stories do not portend a long-lived future trend. If so, then we'll also have to worry that there will never be any TOGoM stories ever again, since there were none within the past year.

But no matter how much angst we, as writers and/or readers, may want to put Clark and Lois through, I think we all want to see them come out triumphant and together at the end of almost every story...if not every story.

Kathy

Wow, what a story! This was awesome, especially the double irony of Clark not getting Lois and Lois not getting Clark. And the way Clark begs Lois to take care of his children - it was so totally heart-wrenching.

Still, I would recommend that fic because it's well-written and all. But I could have done without the epilogue.

ML, thanks for taking my suggestion in the spirit in which it was intended. I meant no criticism towards yourself, your story, or your original epilogue. This was and is your story. You write it the way you want it to be. And I think you should send it to the archives with any explanatory text you might want to add.

Having said that (and having meant it), my opinion is still that the piece stands on its own without the need of any epilogue. The drama of Lois overcoming all that heartache and mental torture is greatly reduced if she didn't actually do all that in some alternate reality. You've given us a wonderful Lois, one who overcomes all kinds of mistakes and stupidity to end up with a man who loves her and not her money, a family who support her and love her unconditionally, and the continuing legacy of Superman.

I liked your story. You're an excellent writer, and I hope to read more offerings from you in the future. I can't promise to love every word, but I will promise to give every word a chance.

And you stick to your guns, you hear? Not everyone likes everything. That's why we have ninety-eleven kinds of fast food and sandwich shops popping up all over the place. You write what you want to write. And thank you for writing this.

Thanks for your comments, Kathy, Olympe and Terry. I appreciate them.

As for the epilogue... part of me still thinks that the original epilogue is the right choice. I put you through all that emotional angst only to tell you at the end that I'm just kidding . (Okay, I admit it. I have an evil side

Oh, wow! this was so beautiful. I'm barely able to form coherent thoughts here, let alone write some decent feedback, but, oh! I absolutely LOVED this story. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Still feel like I'm just getting started, but I'm posting fdbk as I go.

Boy, that has a yuck factor I just didn't see coming.

Nice little exchange. Sweet and cute.

Oh, yeah. A definate yuck. Of course, I didn't like her the moment I found out she didn't bfeed.

Of course, he did. So why haven't I thought of that before? And why haven't I read that in any other fic?

You have a way of making my skin crawl like no one else can. Yuck. This is the worst villain I've read in eons.

What a poetic description of where there friendship has gone.

Elisabeth

Thanks for the feedback, Lara and Elisabeth. I'm glad that you enjoyed the story.

ML