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Let me know what you think...and where you want this to go.

Go Lois! I want her to meet Clark and for Clark to do what he did in the series: instant attraction. Logically it should go that way. Which doesn't, of course, mean that they can't run into trouble farther on as the new timeline diverges farther and farther from the old. Just as long as you save Clark in the end.

Nan

PS: Besides, think of the fun when Lana discovers that Clark has a new girl!

hehe, brave Lois... great idea to start a conversation with a stranger

oh good to hear. I'm very curious now about what will happen in Smallville then

Barb

I love the turn you took with this Shayne! But I admit I am still worried about her changing the future by her actions.

Whoopee! A new Shayne Terry fic!
Update soon!
Hasini.

Or we can use the Tapestry theory (as formulated by Doc Brown while teaching temporal mechanics at MIT.[I think it was the class of 2307.])

Time is a tapestry and we are the threads - pull on a thread and you may change the pattern. but Time is a living tapestry. It repairs itself and a thread that's been tugged on too hard may find itself attached to a different place/or time.

I recall hating temporal mechanics. It gives me a headache.

Oooh! That's kind of like what happened in Pterry's Nightwatch, isn't it? When Time repaired itself by substituting a person from the future in place of somebody who was killed, but not supposed to be killed, from the past?
Uagh! I feel like the part of my brain that's compulsive about grammar is about to hand in notice.

Well, I once read a sci-fi story where the Earth was plunging towards ecological collapse. A group of desperate scientists managed to send a message to the past, using faster-than-light tachyons particles which, according to Einstein, might theoretically exist. When the people of past received the message, they changed their ways and saved the Earth. But the original timeline still existed, and life on Earth died in that one.

Wonderful premise, Shayne! I loved how Lois used her knowledge of the future to place a (winning) bet and win the money she needed to go to Smallville. Oh, she has to make a big impression on Clark! She has to try to stay close to him too, I think. At least I would so much like to see that happen.

Ann

Enjoyed this part Shayne,

Hopefully Lana's not going to feature much in the story - Clark's no longer in high school. Will Pete Ross be in the story?

I'm looking forward to how you will portray Clark - if Lois is 16, then that makes him 18? So on the cusp of adulthood, but still a boy too. So will this be a coming of age story for Clark? Will we look at what the 18 year old Clark does and feels, and believe he's still "our" Clark and yet believe, too, that he's 18?

You ask again where we want this to go.

Not so much to Smallville as to Metropolis.

Also - a Lois who's still Lois - feisty, inquisitive, doesn't suffer fools gladly - that she knows she loves Clark doesn't mean she's had a personality transplant

all the time theory talk above made my head heart - too many strings attached

I know - a blue telephone box suddenly appears in the streets of Smallville, does a bit of a shimmy, out steps the Doctor and .....

c.

Uh....no. I adopt the Janeway Theory of Time Travel: don't ask. Five minutes in to thinking about it I usually lose the will to live.

Shayne, I read part one of this, but was appallingly remiss in not posting fdk on it. I did mean to, but...

Anyway, thoroughly enjoyed it. You've set up an intriguing premise which promises interesting times ahead. I have no suggestions for you - I'm happy to follow where you travel.

I'll probably wait till it's complete to read more. The bus, you know.


LabRat

This is so very interesting. And Lois is just so - so Lois! She's charging ahead and diving in without checking the water level, and her actions with Louie will almost certainly impact her life almost immediately. For one thing, friendly old Louie won't be taking any more candy from this baby. It's too expensive.

And Lois meeting Clark at this point in time, when he's less mature and less experienced, is bound to cause lots of trouble. No matter what theory of time travel one subscribes to, Lois has already altered her past in a substantial manner. Her life isn't going to unfold as she remembered it. This trip may precipitate a bigger argument with her father, or it may cause him to think more highly of her than he did before because she has taken on 'adult' responsibilities and has done something totally unexpected. And Lois might also create a rift between Clark and Lana now instead of letting their relationship fade out on its own, which might also cause lots of serious problems.

At any rate, I like the direction so far. I can't give you any guidance to improve this story, because it's so wonderful! And the first person omniscient viewpoint is unique in LC fanfic, as far as I'm aware. We see everything through Lois's eyes, but since she's already lived it, she knows what's going to happen. (At least, so far she has.)

I wonder if Lois's new attitude will significantly impact her relationship with either her mother or her sister. I know I wish I'd behaved differently in the past in relation to my brother and my parents, so maybe this adventure will be more significant for the Lane family than we might expect.

So, is the next part ready yet?

Oh,Shayne, I'm so happy she didn't hang up and is going to see Clark soon. Another great part! Can't wait to see what happens next.

Jackie

Yay!!! Shayne I'm glad to see another part on this. I keep missing you on IRC so that I can really tell you how much I am enjoying it (and because I'm greedy and hope to rangle a snippet out of you). I like where you are going with this. I'm glad to see you decided to have her jump right in instead of waiting. I don't think waiting would have been very Lois like... plus it makes things a lot less predictable for her.

I can't wait for more Shayne. I'm loving this. I love stories that have a crazy premise but that are written so well that you can really get behind them. Fantastic! Can't wait for more!

I love it! Please continue soon!

Lois has the right idea how to get some money, but this can only be the first step. I only say two words: Stock exchange! Wouldn´t it be great to buy some Microsoft shares (or something like that) and just wait? :rolleyes:

And time travel theories... I don´t like thinking about them, they make my head hurt!

Sweet.

Shades of Back to the future III...

James, who is loving this story.

Hi,

Great part!

Shayne, I *love* how you use Lois's background from the show -- Daddy taking her to the fights, her acquaintance with Bobby Bigmouth-to-be, and Louie. See, I almost never think about that stuff, so when you said she was going to have to raise the money, I was thinking it'd be tough to find a suitable event, but this... it unfolded perfectly logically but I never saw it coming. Way to go!

I wonder if things might be different because of the age. First time 'round, she was the established professional and he had a *lot* to learn. This time (at least from his point of view) he'll be the older and more experienced one, sharing his wisdom with a student.

Oh, and I'm about Lois's age, so all the references to the fashions and albums amuses me no end. You've gotta mention New Coke, too. Actually, if you could work it in, I could tell you all about a high school in Pennsylvania that's burying a time capsule about this point... I crack me up.

PJ

Thoroughly liking it... but where is Part 3?

Your wish is my command.

Many apologies, Shane. I forgot the name of your story, so I've been waiting and waiting for what was already out there.

You're making me nervous in this part, Shane. Louie was a great friend for Lois to have, but I bet he would make one heck of an enemy. Plus, Bobbie is on Louie's team, so he might be part of the bargain.

I better go console myself with part 3.

Elisabeth