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You wrote something and didn't say anything? *gasp* I'm glad I peeked in here just at the right time, or I'd have missed it altogether!

I'm sitting here with a goofy smile on my face and and one of 'em WAFFs settled in my chest. What a very sweet story! I don't really have the energy for more detailed feedback right now, but I will say I got that warm, cuddly feeling of comfort from Jordan's thinking scene. "Hearing" Lois and Clark in the background like that was just... it was like you could (I could, rather, because I'm a dork like that ) feel the love and feeling of home all around. (And that didn't come across at all right, but like I said, it's late. *sigh*)

Yay for writing more! You should do it more often!

Sara (who's off to hit the hay now)

That was beautiful. Looking beyond the obvious to someone who goes above and beyond without recognition-those are the true heroes.

Cute, Paul.

I've seen some other stories where kids are asked to write about their heroes. This is evidently something that is done in school, but somehow I don't ever remember doing that. Weird, huh?

That was wonderful, Paul.

You took a mundane bit of cannon, then gave us insight into why it is, and so gave us more insight into the characters themselves. Nothing overstated, just really very good.

c.

I agree with everyone else. It's cute, and I like how you not only show who each person's hero is, but why. And isn't it funny how both Kent boys chose their mom?

Oh, Paul! You should really write more often. Really...

This was lovely. Waffy without being sickening sweet and very insightful.

Okay, I over analyze things way too much but it just brought a smile to my face to think of how much Jordan was like his father. His father's hero as a boy had been his mother, and his father's hero now was Jordon's mother, was Lois. And so Jordon's hero was both his mother and his father's hero.

Awwwww.

Don't let so much time go before you write your next one.

-- DJ

awww! How sweet! Loved it, Paul.

Hehe, for a while there I thought Jordan was going to choose Clark because he wasn't allowed to choose Superman...

How sweet! I loved the way Clark and Jordan chose their respective mothers. It's so cute. I also liked that Lois chose to write about herself. It so fits her, and it's true in every sense of the word, considering her dysfuntional family.

That was great, Paul. I like the cutting back and forth between the past and the present as well as the overall poignancy. Good job.

Paul,

Absolutely brilliant!

The pain and admiration hidden in these choices shines through.

I don't blame Lois or Jordan for chosing Lois as their hero and for Clark chosing Martha. The woman is always the back bone of the home and as we learn in Proverbs...

"A woman of worth who can one find, for her worth is greater than rubies".

Both Martha and Lois show there values and their love and support for their families.

Please Paul, may we have many more stories from you.

Regards,

Stuart

Great story, Paul!

Guess I should rewrite my comments reply. Too bad I didn't save a copy of the first one.

Oh well. Just gives me an excuse to go back over all that FDK.

So... thanks for the comments, everyone! Glad you guys enjoyed the story.

Very glad to hear that, Sara. I was a little worried about this story, because it felt kind of bare-bones to me. Sketched out. It had some themes and meaning and stuff to it (a first for me!), but it was light on detail. So, while I'm always happy to hear that a story of mine pulled you in, I'm especially happy to hear it this time.

Truth to tell, I don't recall doing that, either. Maybe it's something that only happens in fictional universes. In any case, it's what makes the story work, so that's what's important to me.

Thanks, Carol! And yay! You noticed the cooking theme!

Thanks! That's exactly what I was hoping for.

Yes! For me, that was the whole point of the story. Jordan's bookends allowed me to add a bit more, but the central moment, for me, was Lois's choice.

Also, a few of you pointed out that Jordan and Clark both chose their respective mothers. This is true, but it's only part of it.

Clark's hero was, "my mother, Martha Kent."

Lois's hero was, "myself, Lois Lane."

Jordan's was, "my mother, Lois Lane."

Jordan is what every child is - a new whole made up from parts of what came before. It's true of his choice of hero, it's true of his name ("Jordan Elliot" draws elements from all 3 sets of grandparents - Jor-El, Jonathan, and Ellen), and it's true of his reaction to the crowd (Clark's shyness, Lois's fierce temper, and then something uniquely his: a blend of Clark's geniality with Lois's confidence).

Aww, shucks.

Unfortunately, the reason I've only written two stories (counting my DVD fic) in the past couple of years is not that I chose to retire or to work on writing something else. I seem to have run out of ideas, or the ability to flesh out old ones (I've got a folder that's been gathering virtual dust for years...). Thanks, though.

Thanks again to everyone who commented. Having been out of the game so long, it's really good to come back to such a warm reception.

Paul