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A confession - I started reading this story because I had to (for the archive), but I am so completely hooked on it now!

It's a very clever and fun idea and it's being extremely well-written in a really smooth style. I've always preferred stories that move forward with dialogue and action versus introspection. Not that there isn't introspection - there is, but it's well written and to the point.

I'm glad you decided to post on the boards. I think you're really going to like it here - and I'm absolutely certain that everyone else is going to love having you here.

Terrific.. looking forward to more

You're off to a good start And we don't mind how long stories get so long as they're good -- the better they are, the longer we like them -- so don't worry about it. <g>

You've got a good handle on young Lois, I think -- I especially appreciated this bit:
Very poignant, how she interprets the teasing.

PJ

This looks like this is going to be a very enjoyable story! I'm looking forward to the rest of it.
I hope you aren't putting yourself down here--Part 1 is very good. If the rest gets better it's going to be fantastic.

Vonceil

You have definitely caught my interest.

I love how Lois and Lucy seem to be so different, even though they both come from the same home. It's clear that Lois is shielding Lucy as much as possible. I'm really curious to see how such an independent Lois will react to "being taken care of" instead of doing all the caregiving herself.

I have a funny feeling that Clark may not be able to keep his secret under wraps the whole summer. After all, we all know how just nosy Lois Lane is...

This struck me. Lois doesn't understand that wanting a son-in-law is not at all the same as wanting a son.

No, sorry. I'm not feeling very patient. I want more now!


Really? Wow. It's already quite good...

~C Noetal (impatiently waiting for more )

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This is a great start!

I, too, liked it a lot. And because I am the world's greatest Lois fan, I was very moved by this 13-year-old Lois whose goal in life is to adopt her baby sister Lucy when she herself is eighteen, so that she can save Lucy from their dysfunctional parents. Never mind that she herself will not be able to go to college or make the best of her academic abilities.

But now she and Lucy are going to spend three weeks in Smallville with the Kents! With Martha, Jonathan and 15-year-old Clark! This is promising, indeed. Come back soon with more!

Ann

I've just come across your story, and after only one part, I already love it! I can't wait to get home to read more.

I'm enjoying this very much. Very well written.

My mother was a foster parent to her sister in the same way Lois plans. It's interesting that I never saw Lois in her, until you wrote her that way, of course.

Like you, I also like to set my stories in the modern day. Technology was just too weird, even only a few years ago.

I can't wait to read more, especially knowing that Clark has no idea what he is in for.

Elisabeth

Sorry I'm late...

Just loved the first part and it was nice and long! I'm hooked.

Poor Lois. Mind you I was craving a story like this (see Mindkin hmm wonder if I spelled it right).

Running off to the next part.