I agree with Terry. Lois and Clark don't have a typical bro/sis relationship--although she does look up to him and they do share a mom & dad. Besides, Lois changed her name, but was never adopted by the Kents. Still, it's enough of a gray area that those who enjoy wagging their tongue will be certain to raise their eyebrows. (And I'm not sure you need to put a warning in the archive version. But you might want to be careful if you plan on developing their relationship further--which of course, I hope you do.)
She smiled over Paul’s shoulder at Martha as Martha kept an eye on Jonathan and Lucy and Lois and Paul. Clark was standing behind his mother with his hand resting on her shoulder. Paul twirled her around and dipped her suddenly.
It was right about here that I started getting creaped out--suddenly realizing who Paul was, as well as who he would become.
I loved Lois' description of life as a Daily Planet intern. Her comments about Perry were too funny, especially
The horn on his golf cart broke, and guess who got to fix it?
Martha's grandmother's pearls were a wonderful addition to the story. I had to grin as I read
“If it makes you feel better, you can always loan them to Clark’s wife on their wedding day.”
I feel like amending, 'Unless you want to wear them to Clark's wedding.'
It seems odd that there aren't openings on the paper for journalism majors. Of course, I went to a private school where such a thing would be required, even for freshmen. I don't know how big Met U. is, but that seems as heartless as Paul says it is.
Watching Lois get all gussied up for Paul was a little bit gross. I'm all for a story where Lois dates someone other than Clark, but knowing what a jerk Paul is... And then she puts on Martha's pearls.
I'm so glad that she didn't go through with it. In your story it's Martha's and Rachel's words that keep her grounded. In reality, it was more likely Jonathon's doing. Having a stable father means so much to a girl.
I do like that you give Paul the chance to redeem himself. He isn't a jerk to her when she tells him she's not ready and he does ask her out one more time.
Still, it's nice to see Lois pleasantly unattached.
Elisabeth
