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Well, what do you think?

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Well written as always but I have no clue where you are going. Interesting restart.

I, too, love this, but like Patrick, I have no idea what is going on.

Your stories always have an impressive specific weight. They are not to be trifled with. In this story, there is Lois's unusual strength, her unfamiliar appetite, her fatigue which makes her sleep for nine hours straight with her head on Clark's shoulder...and there is, perhaps, blood on her hands. You certainly make me wonder, Shayne. And then there is the mystery and the incomprehensible tragedy of the collapsed city of Sunnydale. (Consider that name, people. Roll it on your tongues and taste it.) It's like a sunken Atlantis sitting like an unfathomable bogeyman in the middle of this story. And then there is the celebration of life and joy symbolized by the Mexican family with its many children, who try to embrace an unwilling Lois, and whose home is a symphony of pictures of children, lovely Spanish rugs on the floor and walls painted in reds and pinks, the colors of blood, life and love.

In the midst of all this, the appearance of an amazing man from Krypton who hasn't even revealed himself to the world seems almost mundane.

The feeling of melancholy and mystery is very strong here, and I very much want to read the rest of it. The lack of a tbc at the end of the story, as well as the missing figure one after the title, was a mistake, I'm sure.

Ann

So is Lois the newest Vampire Slayer?

AmyN

I love it! Well-written, and I'd love to see more - ASAP.

Lois gets really strong after Sunnydale, of all places, gets evaporated? I get it, I get it! Can't wait what else you have in store for our favorite couple. Hopefully not a TE. The forces at work are none to trifle with - not even for a Kryptonian.

Oh, and Lois, just for further reference: Stake 'em!

intriguing! I look forward to more

Crossover with BtVS! Brilliant! I can't wait to see where you go with this. Now there are two revelations instead of the one, and they're both trying to figure out the source of their powers. Nifty premise. Pleaseohplease update often!

Hutch

I can't wait to read more of this, it's a fantastic start! It's beautifully written.

Laura

For some reason this line gave me the giggles.

So we've got Buffy Town (I think!), an oddly strong and traumitized Lois and a strangely prescient Clark. I'm intrigued, Shayne.

Yes the square dance line was so Clark. You have my attention too. And ditto to what everyone else said. More soon. Laura

I'm hooked! Hooked I tell you! Is Lois a vampire slayer now? Brilliant!

MOre more more! ASAP!

The whole wrecked city thing from Buffy is such a natural for any superhero crossover, I'm surprised it isn't done more often. Not that there's much that Superman could do about it, apart from looking for bodies - given how fast everything happened in the show it'd all be over well before the news got to the Planet.

Anyway, this looks like it's going to be entertaining, looking forward to more.

*bounces in her seat in excitement*

....coming down from the sugar high and excitement...

Besides my obvious like of both shows... superbly written. I love your descriptions and the interactions as you write them. I can't wait for more!

Here's what I think has happened.

Lois was about to get killed in the Congo when her slayer strength kicked in and she didn't realize it until she'd laid waste to a bunch of guys who were trying to kill her. Now she's trying to figure out what happened, and her body is trying to adjust to the higher Slayer metabolism and energy demands she's putting on it (hence the uncontrolled hunger and long nap on the trip). I can't wait for her to get mad at Clark and take a swing at him, realizing as she connects that her new-found strength might kill a normal human, and being astounded when he barely reacts (or gets slammed into a wall with no injuries).

Very interesting crossover going, Shayne. I'm not a Buffy fan, but even I recognize the town that collapsed into the earth due to some Buffy-verse event. I always thought the name "Sunnydale" was deliberate irony, given all the darkly insane and demonic things happening there. And why didn't Lois realize that when Clark said he shouldn't have been able to be so certain? Is she that distracted by her situation? It's understandable, sure, but she's also a top-notch reporter. Surely she'll pick up on that slip before long.

I'm definitely going to follow this one. Keep up the great work!

Wow. Thanks for all the comments! It occurred to me that this is a fandom that for the most part doesn't watch a lot of Buffy. The only way I could think of to do a crossover that would please everyone was to not write it as a crossover.

Most crossovers are terrible because they rush over everything in an effort to hurry up and get to the good part, when the heroes from two shows meet. In the process, characterization, setting, plot...it's all thrown out the window.

This isn't a story about Buffy at all. She may or may not make an appearance later, but at this point I don't see that as a main focus for the story. This is a story about Lois, and her reactions to an unnatural situation.

By keeping the focus strongly on that, and on her reactions to her new partner, I think it'll be more palatable for most folcs than otherwise.

The Buffy fans should be ok with it too, I hope.

As for speculations by folcs like Terry and Ann...well, you may be right on the money, you might not...I'm not saying at the moment

But I love the articulate way you express those speculations, and I appreciate the effort it takes to write them.

As for the destroyed city angle, Marcus...I'd think that in a post-Katrina and post-9-11 world, people would have more to write about. I suppose that sometimes too much reality is just too scary.

Intriguing and original.

Yvonne

I think Lois was a potential (albeit an 'old' one) and that when Willow activated the slayers, she activated Lois.
AWESOME!!!

I just halfway through this and me being an old time fan of the Whedonverse. Well, halfway through and what a hoot. All the details, told form an outside. And Lois meeting Clem. The kittens. You're killing me here.

Can you believe I'd completely forgotten about the knights at the end of S5. Or rather, it took me ages to make the connection. I kept thinking you're talking about Glory's minions.

Michael

Oh, and hellgod Clark? L O L

Yes, this is a great story. I got flummoxed by the dates, not noting the year. Enjoy all!

Artemis