Lois & Clark Forums Forums Fan Fiction Lois & Clark Fanfic FDK: Witness Protection 2 or Great revelations never get old

I didn't quote last time, being the lazybutt I tend to be, but I will this time. Because there are more specific things I like other than the immeadiacy of the style. Which I like. A lot. And can't get enough of--

*Ahem* Right. Excuse the tendency to gush. We've established I like first person Lois POV with my squeal last time. On to a long-ish quote.

I think this is one of the more poignant revelations I've read simply because of the mood at the beginning of the scene (I know it already was part of the first version of this, I just had to redeem myself by making a substantial comment other than 'squee'). She's just woken up, it's dark, she thinks she's alone, etc. The whole movement, stillness, the soft thud which indicates that it's really quiet. Either way all this happening after her fear at the events from gives this a feel that really appeals to me.

As for the dialogue after the "I've been horrible to you" line--Lara's part (as I understand it)--is right on the money and fits really well. The way that he turns her statements into positives and logics out her behavior is so Clark, it rings so...genuine (but thinking about it, really, I bet he's also relieved not to be screamed at, so he can afford to be super nice).

So classic Lois. The non-screaming path to anger works very well here, because despite the lying she's at his place because she knows that he cares about her and that he'll keep her safe. I think this makes it so she can't just yell at him and walk away (even without a threat to her life, which provides a logical reason) He's also not throwing the secret in her face.

*chuckle* A very nice and WAFFy ending. The story feels a lot more wrapped up now. Oh, Lara--if I had written this I'd feel that I had NOTHING to feel shy about. It's really great stuff that seamlessly captures the vibe from where Sue left it off. It matches perfectly in both in the voice and in the overall mood. So, so, so nice.

*sigh* Great revelations never get old,
alcyone

This story reminds me of ten things I hate about you when Lois lists all the things she hates about Clark, ofcourse me being the nerd that I am I almost squealed in delight. Lois can be such a masochist sometimes, I swear The ending to this was just so incredibly sweet it made me melt into a puddle of waffy goo.

Thanks alot guys this was the perfect distraction from my paper that just doesnt seem to wanna write itself.

<squeals girlishly>

Ahhhhh! The two betas I adore with all my heart have gone and written something together - you know, you two should really try this again sometime... really.

It was so good! I could see parts of Sue and parts of Lara in there and I just loved it.

And like has already been said, I loved the ending where Lois lists off all the things she 'hates' about Clark. And then she says she really, 'really', hates him and he says he hates her too - LOL!!!

Very well done ladies <hugs>

-- DJ

Lara, please come out and talk, pretty please? <g>

Absolutely wonderful! I loved it!

~Sheila

It can't, but it's quite funny, and that's a really great line. <g>

*nods* Yep. And we all know why, too.

Ooh, that's way sneaky, and I like it.

Oh, so the ending was perfect! WTG Lara and whatever tweaking you did, Sue!

JD

Sweet. I "hated" every minute of reading it

doublel

Oh that was great! Very well done.

Jackie

*waves from her hiding place, behind her iMac*

You know... it's easy to look good when you're just adding a few paragraphs to a story that was already awesome to begin with.

I just wrote little bit of conversation and ultimately had Lois realize how badly she hated Clark - and spent the whole time sniffling like an idiot while I was writing that, which was how I knew it wasn't such a bad idea I was sitting on.

And then I sent it over to Sue, because I wasn't really going to post this at first... But I wanted her to see it, since it was the end of her story. Well, she grabbed her magic pen and made some edits - and then I made more *lol* - and it stopped being something I thought people would want to bonk me on the head for. ("the nerve of that girl, thinking she can write an ending to something of Sue's" ...ouchie.)

Oh, hey - I'll gladly write the end if you write the N...

Can I tell you how excited I am that you wrote an ending for this Lara? Can I? I loved the ending and I loved the conversation between the two. Do I think she is going to probably have a word or two to say to him later? Probably. She is a bit shell shocked right now... but I don't think Mr. Kent is going to be as smug later on when she has stopped being so emotional.

I love a good revelation fic and I loved this one as well. Thank you two ladies for writing it and sharing it.

Wonderful, ladies!

C.

wow ... what to say? great

Hey, I was just along for the ride. Lara made it sing. She's right - it's easy to look good when someone else writes a story and then lets you put your name next to theirs. Thanks, Lara, for letting me be co-billed along with you!

Thanks to everyone who has left FDK; but it really should go to Lara. Without her this would have just been an unfinished snippet. She gave it a life of its own.

Wow, I hated that story!

Cute and waffy! Well done ladies!

~Lois Lane Wanna Be

I've said it before, but I really hate this so much!

This was absolute adorable waffy perfection. Your styles blend together so well! You definitely have to work together more often!

And I promise to come back with much better FDK when I wake up, but it's past 3:30 here and I really should be in bed. I'll be back (and I mean it this time)!

this was perfect. wow. You should do this more often.

Now I don't feel like I missed out so much after the extended ending disappeared. It was great. I do have to admit that I was distracted through the whole end knowing that Clark was standing there in his boxer shorts, though.

My favorite line was in regards to Clark running around on silly errands in his sleep.

A work of art!

Elisabeth

He had a t-shirt on, too, you know. I think boxers are a lot less revealing than the Suit.

Boxers may be less revealing, but they are certainly more intimate. Perhaps I'm thinking of how much I enjoy it when James kicks back to relax with me wearing only a t-shirt and boxers. Hmm... Is it hot in here?

Elisabeth