If there's another feedback thread out there, then please excuse me. I looked but couldn't find one.
“I still have a mind to have you build a dog house around that old truck and then if your father still adores it so, than let him live in it!” Martha announced with nary a trace of joking in her voice.
Nice banter.
Had the secret of the Kent family, which in its own right, become the Kent family, or much of its life source that is, just died; much like the old saying not with a bang or whimper but rather the eyes of their longtime neighbor, Wayne Irig?
I was a little confused by this. Are you saying that the secret has become the life source of the Kent family? I suppose that without the secret the family will become something it is not, but I don't understand why the family would die when all three of them are still alive--particularly since Waynce is a longtime neighbor and, presumably, a friend.
But then again, perhaps nearly 30 years later, his own family’s buried secret, which had unbeknownst to the Kent’s nearly caused the Irig family to consider moving all those many years ago, at last come to the surface? Whether he liked it or not, judging by both Superman and Martha’s sudden haste to distance themselves from one another after a harried split second conversation when Irig was first noticed by the man of steel, that time had come at last.
This is certainly curious. A second secret that Wayne feels is endangered by Superman's presence?
It's still unclear as to whether or not Wayne knows that Clark is Superman.
Superman gave the startled farmer a last wave and then in a blink had himself and his mother soaring above the stormy sky home. Or to the home they both had known until this very moment. Like their family, that, too, might now be lost forever.
That seems a bit harsh, doesn't it? Is Wayne knowing such a big deal? Isn't he an old friend?
This was day was becoming eerily similar to a fateful day a couple years ago when her only son was killed to the world in a casino. Only a miraculous save by the man of steel had resurrected Clark that time. Was there anyone who would do so for his family on this occasion? As their respective feet touched the ground, a foot or so from the farmhouse door, Martha silently prayed that someone could.
It took me a second read to understand the reference. She's saying that her family is now dead, similar to the way that Clark had died in TOGOM. But why is she so afraid? Is this Wayne Irig so different from the one we know?
I definately think you should continue writing, but I also need help understand why the situation is this serious. In the past, it was always Jonathon that overreacted. Is Martha overreacting now, or is this Wayne Irig different?
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But I'll see what I can do to clarify a little bit beforehand. No, so you and everyone else knows i never meant to imply that if Wayne knew Clark was Superman it would literally kill the entire Kent family. It has been written before and I agree in part that keeping this secret has become such a part of their lives that in that sense if someone who were to offhandedly find out, it MIGHT feel as though a part of their life up to trhat point had ended. Does that make more sense, I hope? 