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Okay?
Tank (who figures he'll leave it up to the gentle readers to come up with something)
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Good!!  I liked the way Lois stopped Perry  Jose 
"Practice up your shielding spells...and remember to duck if you see green light coming your way." Harry Potter to Wizengamot in OotP trial A Bad Week in the Wizengamot
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Cool beans! Love the scene with Perry, that was the only way she'd be able to have any hope of staying at the Planet. Nice dialogue. I also loved the way she planned out the whole gangster encounter! Bumping Clark outta the way and oops! getting shot..gotta love that gal! Lois clenched her jaw against the pain, then strained to speak. "Give it a few more seconds."  LOL! I hope that the wrap up will be what I'm hoping for? How WILL you finish this?!  ~Liz
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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Arggggggggggggghhhh - part four! And I still haven't managed to catch up with part two yet!  Right...soon as I get back from this afternoon's appointment, I'm doing nothing else until I'm caught up. Honest injun. /me would make a girl guide salute at this point but it's hard to do with pawsComments pending...  LabRat
Athos: If you'd told us what you were doing, we might have been able to plan this properly.
Aramis: Yes, sorry.
Athos: No, no, by all means, let's keep things suicidal.
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This was wonderful, Tank! LOVED the conversation with Perry - beautifully done!! I'm glad Lois realized that conversation was a pivotal one in their relationship and that Perry was big enough to accept it! Great job! LOL on Lois anticipating each event as they unfolded and how she tripped Clark out of the way of the bullets - very clever!! Love this new universe that you've forced upon Lois, as crazy and upsidedown as it seems, it's a wonderful twist on things. Missy (who doesn't know how Tank is going to wrap this up in one more segment - unless there is another sequel planned... )
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Exactly what Missy said, especially the signature line 
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Swordfish! ROTF! This is one hell of a roller coaster ride. But I am hanging on for dear life. Laura ( who is still trying to shake the image of Lois and Perry being intimate out of her thoughts! Blllyyyyicckkk)
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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Hi, Great part.
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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This is so great. Just excellent!
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Tank An excellent part! I can't wait to see how you wrap this up. Please post the next part ASAP. Tricia 
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Oh, boy, but I'm loving this, Tank. What a fascinating, intriguing universe you've set up here - I agree though that there's plenty of scope here for more than just one more segment, so curious to see how you wrap this one up. From a very funny initial segment you've moved on to produce some genuinely poignant moments among the fun and a Lois who is admirable in her attempts to deal with all the shocks.  In this last segment, I especially loved Clark's awe of his new partner's knowledge and those last two lines were absolutely perfect. Wonderful! LOL. Looking forward to the final part...and hoping perhaps for a sequel at some point. This is just too good to miss out on. LabRat
Athos: If you'd told us what you were doing, we might have been able to plan this properly.
Aramis: Yes, sorry.
Athos: No, no, by all means, let's keep things suicidal.
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Hey!
Just like everybody else, I'm finding this new universe more than interesting. The way Lois dealt with Perry and his feelings for her was great.
It's fun seeing Clark so amazed at Lois's reactions, at how she deals with teh story and all. If he only knew!
Dying to see how you wrap this up!
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Hi Tank, Just caught up with this story and I'm enjoying it very much. You've created a very intriguing universe and managed to mix poignancy and humour together very successfully. Can't wait to see how you wrap this up in one more part. I'm hoping that you might be thinking of a sequel. Yours Jenni
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Yay!!!! My favorite quoted quotable was "What's your secret and can I have it?" Excellent placement!!!! Everyone is right...you can't stop with just one more installment. Another epic universe is born! (If your body falls apart on you, will that leave you more time to write???) Best, Sherry
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Tank,
another great part
ditto others
I love your universe
more soon and I'll try to stay caught up
merry
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Thanks to all for the nice comments.
I won't be going into any great detailed responses here as it is painful to type (and I'm holding off on my pain killers till bedtime), but it seems that most of you got out of this instalment what I hoped you would.
Yes it is one crazy world that Lois has gotten herself into, and it gets a little crazier in the next instalment, as you shall see.
Tank (who wonders which of the gentle readers will guess the slight twist coming up in the last instalment)
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