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#48819 12/31/07 10:01 PM
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Okay, you realize that when you post something like this you have to write a whole story about it, right?

I love this great beginning (hint hint). It interests me. A lot. Lois meeting Clark on a more equal level. Bruce taking the place of Lex in some of the dialogue etc. All that jazz.

So will there be a sequel? Huh? Huh?

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This is a delightful little vignette. When the reader considers what LaraMoon didn't ask to have, or not to have, in her vignette, but got or was spared nonetheless, said reader has to giggle! clap

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I'm with Beth. While this can definitely stand on its own, I'd love to see where it leads to.

It has a very sweet touch to it and Lois and Clark are right in character (I am not familiar enough with Bruce Wayne to judge there). Clark's "This close?" seems a bit forward for him, but not really out of the range of things he would say to Lois early in their meeting to get a reaction out of her. Of course, he never seemed to be quite as successful in the reaction he got as you hint in this story!

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Grandma’s passing also left her with an unexpected roommate, since Lucy needed to find a new place to stay as soon as Grandma’s rent expired.
Nice explanation for why Lucy was living with Lois! And I like how you introduced Clark.

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His eyes were smoky as he pulled her tighter in his embrace. “You mean this close?”
*LOL* I always loved this part of the pilot.

Loved the story! Happy New Year!!

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awwwwwwww!!! How very sweet! smile Thank you!!

When I looked at the topic and saw 'ficathon' I totally started scratching my head, wondering why Elisabeth was posting another story... And then I scrolled to the end to see notes and check who this was for... and almost fell off my chair - mostly from laughter, because the wants and wants not are just plain hilarious.

Although I have to admit I feel quite bad now for not telling people that, after playing swictharoo with a few participants for different reasons, I've actually found myself with an assignment and someone's been assigned to write something for me as well... blush

Off to read.. and commenting as I go. smile (ooh, and did I say Thank you? *giggles* Thank you, so, SO much!! You have no idea how nice it was to find this today - I'm not exactly having the world's best holidays so this was just wonderful and perfect.)

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Lois stepped out onto the cold, night air. She would gladly exchange the warmth of the party for a few moments of peace and quiet.
wink Oh boy do I know how that feels!

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Given the choice, Lois would gladly skip over November, December and January. Perhaps the bears had it right. This would be an excellent time to hibernate. It could be her own holiday tradition.
Hehe! Totally Lois to think that way. smile

You know, come to think of it, I would totally do that, too. Well, maybe not November, but the other two I'd sleep through. wink

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In fact, she didn’t really have any wishes for that star, except maybe for a feeling of meaning. Obviously, her life was fulfilling and meaningful--paper subscriptions told her that much--but sometimes it didn’t feel as purposeful as it really was. There were plenty of reasons to get out of bed in the morning; she just sometimes forgot what they were.
Wait, wait, wait... have you been talking to Schnuffichen? I swear I was telling her exactly this, just last night. I'm really turning into Lois, I think. *lol*

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It would give her the opportunity to hobnob with Bruce Wayne.
And this is where I would actually PAY to BE Lois Lane. *giggles madly*

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It wasn’t that she was so interested in Bruce Wayne.
Psssht! She should be!! LOL!

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“Salmon Roe and Crudités? Fig and Walnut Tapenade with Goat Cheese? Foie Gras with Date Puree and Pomegranate?”
Oooh! sounds good. Can I have some, too?

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“Has Mr. Wayne arrived yet?” she inquired.

“I believe he has been detained.”
Yeah, he's being all dark and... um... knighty, I guess. *giggles*

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She wondered what kind of art a billionaire playboy collected, hoping it wasn’t sex toys or the like.
dance

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Heck, this man was odd enough to be Bruce Wayne himself.
Indeed! (and um... this sort of put an idea in my head for a story... um....)

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She had read about both Wayne’s charm and his extraordinary physique. The man in front of her was certainly attractive and easily conversant--some women found those things charming. With the suit coat hiding both waist and shoulders, it was difficult to determine whether or not he had an athletic build.
I'm sorry, did someone mention "extraordinary physique"? mmmm.... *dreamy sigh* - it's the arms, I tell you. The arms. Trust me. LOL! (and, yes, OMG, extraordinary physique on either of these men!)

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If he wasn’t Bruce Wayne then he was probably a nobody she would never see again, and therefore it wouldn’t matter.
Pffft! Lois... it's Superman! wink You'll see him again plenty. Believe us.

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“Clark Kent, Daily Bugle,” he gasped behind her. She smiled as she heard how breathless he sounded.
*lol* Does that mean in this universe that he's Spider-Man instead? wink hehe!

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Unfortunately for Clark Kent, she ate newspapermen for breakfast--scooped them and served them on toast.
Not this guy, Lois. Not *this* guy!

I love how Bruce is sorta kinda Lex Luthor here. smile Great idea!!

The ending is just superb! smile

You know... I can see all sorts of stories as spin offs of this one. (Although, I gotta keep the muse in check, he still owes me the end of several stories he wanted to start!)

Thank you SO much for this story, Elisabeth! sloppy I really loved it and it was just what I needed to start the new year in a nice way. smile


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Having beta-ed this for my Elisabeth, I knew you would like it.

James


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Perhaps Lucy was right. It had obviously been far too long since she had seriously dated if her body responded to a little dance--okay, so it was a close dance--but her body responded as if a little dance were actually foreplay. She was mad; really, really mad, she reminded herself.
Duh, because it is. At least for her with this particular dance partner?

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“You don’t get it,” she argued both with him and her brainless libido. “I finally had my chance, and you ruined it.”
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Sequel please. Ok. Not sequel. More like parts 2 - n (where n > *digs up at least two digit number*)

Michael

PS: Just an idea I got when wondering whether it's Clark or Bruce in the weapons chamber: Our Alternate Universe. Clark has lost his parents and is raised in Gotham City as the charge of a billionaire playboy. Starts wearing tights, a red shirt during his late teenage years and though college. Then goes on working for the Gotham *insert Batman canon newspaper here*. Chance meeting with Lois Lane. Or perhaps they meet during his early college days while he is more active in his role as side kick.


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Unfortunately for Clark Kent, she ate newspapermen for breakfast--scooped them and served them on toast.
Think again Lois you have met your match!

Wonderful, I think it should continue with several more chapters.

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Michael

PS: Just an idea I got when wondering whether it's Clark or Bruce in the weapons chamber: Our Alternate Universe. Clark has lost his parents and is raised in Gotham City as the charge of a billionaire playboy. Starts wearing tights, a red shirt during his late teenage years and though college. Then goes on working for the Gotham *insert Batman canon newspaper here*. Chance meeting with Lois Lane. Or perhaps they meet during his early college days while he is more active in his role as side kick.
Michael, there's a crossover fic-a-thon on the challenge portion of the boards that has your name on it.

Elisabeth

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That was such a nice little vignette, Elisabeth.

It's great to read how you swapped Lex's White Orchid Ball from the pilot with Bruce Wayne's New Years party, keeping a lot of the dialog (with minor adjustments) and concepts (balcony, meeting in the weapons room); you really made it work.

The idea that Clark would work for the Bugle had me smiling, too.

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Perhaps the bears had it right. This would be an excellent time to hibernate.
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She turned back to the crowd. Clark Kent was still watching her. He raised his champagne to bring in the New Year with her, even from across the crowd.
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She raised her glass toward his. “Happy New Year,” she silently mouthed.
I like how you did not fall into the trap of just having to have them kiss (I don't know if I could have resisted with the New Years setting just screaming for it wink ), but still managed to establish that there is a certain connection between them.

I hope it's okay to mention this, but I found it a little harsh that you called Cat a "trampy journalist-wannabe." I don't care too much about the character myself, but still ...

In my opinion, this vignette stands on its own nicely, but now that some people mentioned it: it would also make a great starting point for a longer alternate world fic.

I would definitely be interested in that smile

Thank you,

Eva


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Thank you all for your delicious feedback.

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Although I have to admit I feel quite bad now for not telling people that, after playing swictharoo with a few participants for different reasons, I've actually found myself with an assignment and someone's been assigned to write something for me as well...
Relax, Lara. I wrote out of appreciation and not out of sympathy.

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I'm not exactly having the world's best holidays so this was just wonderful and perfect.
I'm sorry to hear that. It was probably my worst holiday season ever, as well. I'm glad I could be a light for you.

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Heck, this man was odd enough to be Bruce Wayne himself.
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Indeed! (and um... this sort of put an idea in my head for a story... um....)
Nobody's holding you back. I, for one, love it when you get ideas.

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*lol* Does that mean in this universe that he's Spider-Man instead? hehe!
Tee Hee! I had just wanted to give a knod to the man in red and blue, but I suppose it sounds like he's Spidey.

I appreciate your desire for more; Beth, Michael, and cp33; but I'm not the author to write it. I've already changed the character of Bruce Waynce so that he is just a vague resemblance of what he is supposed to be (but I couldn't have a case of mistaken identity if the man's face was on the cover of People magazine every year). I'm honestly not a Batman fan; I'm just a fan of LaraMoon. smile

I'm glad Lara's desires and such tickled your funny bone, Ann. I actually put a lot of thought into what she would want/not want--enough so that I didn't mind making a joke at my own expense (and at the expense of my own Fox).

Thanks also for the constructive criticism, anonpip. I didn't think it was forward him to pull her close after her hand found its way into his pocket, but it is a bit out of character for the L & C we're used to.

Hi, Camy. I included Grandma's death because I thought it would rank highly in why the ending year was bad. Lucy's arrival would also rank highly in a year-end review, but I imagined bickering sisters might be both a positive and negative factor. Also, I'm glad I included a favorite of yours from the series.

Eva, I'm touched by your feedback, particularly since you included such thoughtful constructive criticism. I included the swipe at Cat because I wanted to show what a surly mood that Lois is in (and Cat is not her favorite person in the newsroom). I appreciate your opposing view and will give it careful thought as I edit this for the archive.

Thanks again for reading and posting comments,


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Also thanks to Mona for her kind and encouraging words in the other thread.

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Having beta-ed this for my Elisabeth, I knew you would like it.
Ah, James, you know me so well. wink

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PS: Just an idea I got when wondering whether it's Clark or Bruce in the weapons chamber: Our Alternate Universe. Clark has lost his parents and is raised in Gotham City as the charge of a billionaire playboy.
You know.. there is a comic book story (called "Speeding Bullets") where baby Kal-El is raised by Thomas and Martha Wayne... They name him Bruce (imagine that!) and he becomes, yes, Batman. wink Of course, he still manages to meet Lois. I have the comic at home, but um... I haven't gotten around to reading it yet, so I don't know how it ends. blush

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Gotham *insert Batman canon newspaper here*.
Gotham Gazette. Or Gotham Times, as per the websites for Dark Knight.

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I'm sorry to hear that. It was probably my worst holiday season ever, as well. I'm glad I could be a light for you.
*hugs Elisabeth*
You're a nice, colorful Christmas light on my virtual tree.

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I've already changed the character of Bruce Waynce so that he is just a vague resemblance of what he is supposed to be (but I couldn't have a case of mistaken identity if the man's face was on the cover of People magazine every year).
Awww! You did just fine with him, I promise!

Btw, the rest of that paragraph that I'm not quoting here had me going "aww!" so loud that Eric came running down to see if something was wrong... which of course, when he saw I had tears in my eyes convinced him that there was. *giggles* You have NO idea what it did to my poor, depressed little soul to read that line. Thank you. sloppy

I have to say... I haven't had a really strong urge to write anything LnC in a good long while, especially with the Batman sucking up all my free time and energy since, oh... [K]nightfall? And I was looking forward to a nice break, too, but I'm reading this again and I'm getting a serious itch to pick this up and try and continue where you left off. Looks I'll be writing LnC/Batman crossovers for a long time to come. *giggles*


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I have the comic at home, but um... I haven't gotten around to reading it yet, so I don't know how it ends.
My first thought was, "Of course you do."

But then you said you didn't finish reading it! Sacrilege!!! dizzy

Looking forward to your continuance of this story.

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Interesting beginning. I hope for a sequel, too. Maybe it could be written by Lara with Elizabeth's collaboration. wink

Thank you for sharing it. cool

Andreia


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