Hey guys, thanks for the feedback. Sorry I've taken my time getting round to replying to it.
Carol, I'm sorry I didn't put in the chocolate line for you! I tried, but by the time I mangled it enough to fit into the conversation it was so far away from the original it seem pointless.
For everyone else, Carol suggested adding in this line from The Man of Steel Bars into Lois and Martha's conversation about cooking
I know how to make four things. This is the only one without chocolate.
Ann, I hope Martha didn't come across as too meddlesome. Lois needed someone to try and make her see some sense, Martha just seemed to be the perfect candidate.
Beth, thanks for the feedback, as always, and keep on writing yourself. How's the sequel to Honesty coming?
Elisabeth, I appreciate your enthusiasm, but may I point out that I used the word '
work' the implication being that it isn't ready, although I'm pleased if you consider this story as being at that standard