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This part just creaped me out. You write Luthor to be so ruthless and manipulative. I could just envision how difficult it was going to be for Clark to hide out from him, particularly as he lacks confidence.

Of course, Lois now has to pick up her life again after having it turned upside-down. That can't be easy for her. Yet, I can't imagine her doing anything else.

You had me worried about the Kents for awhile. Glad they're safe. (Although I'm still worried about them, as well as Lois & Clark and the scientist.)

Elisabeth
who is amazed that feedback for this part got missed--it totally has to be because of the Kerths

Alisha, this part also creeped me out. You do a good job of that (which is a good thing)!

I'm glad that the Kents are safe, but I have doubts about Lois' safety. She's in more danger than ever now that Luthor has decided she would be useful.

Keep the parts coming!

I, too, really like this story, although I have to admit that I rather read it in bits and pieces, because the Luthor parts creep me out!

Anyway, I loved how you described Donna's feelings before she decided to help Lois and Clark escape. This, in particular, was so moving:

Poor Doona!!!

This was lovely:

I really thought the Kents had been killed. Thank God they weren't!! But I'm worried about Lois. Is Lucy really going to be the protection she needs?

Fascinating story! I'm looking forward to more.

Ann

Alisha - I just sent you an email for something else and remembered I hadn't commented here yet.

I still love this!!

/me stares at inbox willing another part to appear
Carol

Thanks once again for the feedback.

I'm not entirely sure what to make of the creepiness of Luthor. On the one hand I'm glad that I can write stuff that is genuinely creepy, but on the other I really hope he won't start scaring you away from reading. He is supposed to be a baddy, you know!

- Alisha

Creepy bad guys compliment a good writer. Leave him in. Leave him scary.

Elisabeth
who will happily e-mail her 2-cent postage wherever it needs to go

Alisha, don't worry about your Luthor. It's me. I just don't like villains much, but I think that many other people do - in stories, at least!

Ann

I am still a little worried about Donna, but I was awed at the description of Metropolis. As we come close to the climax, stuff like this heightens the tension:

alcyone