Thanks for the comments! I really appreciate it!
I have to say, something about this line stuck with me after I read it (Thanks, Desiree!) and while I didn't actually intend to write anything at first, a whole host of ideas went through head. My favorite of the rejected ones was that Jimmy was actually a slimy monster under his clothes - he looked kind of like the aliens on the Simpsons
but dripping with slime.
This idea came much later and while it doesn't make me laugh in the same way, it lent itself much more to a story.
It's good to know that even when I feel like my muse is on vacation, I can still get something out that's mildly entertaining.