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#54506 08/08/08 04:37 AM
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Nice update. I absolutely, positively loved the description of Lois and Clark when they kissed.

I really didn’t expect THAT reaction from Ellie but I guess I should have. While in the “courting” stage, Kryptonians should never be allowed to say anything to their significant other while in a state of emotional distress. Of course, pretty much the same can be said for everyone. smile

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Great part, Beth.

Jay breaking up with her for her. Isn't he sweet. And I'm just sure that Ellie told Jon, Jon told Kaylie, and now Kaylie will tell Jay laugh

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"What we have here is a failure to communicate."
Jay's life is finally starting to straighten out and now this. What's a retired field agent to do?

I wonder what Ellie and Jay would show in the same exam. I also wonder - assuming Ellie is right, that her aura doesn't flow into and fill up Jay - whether the reason it doesn't happen for them is because of Ellie's deep-seated issues or if there was some residual damage caused by Jay's memory wipe and restore. If the problem is real, and it's organic, then it can be dealt with.

But Ellie has to understand what her father had to learn. You cannot make decisions for the person you love, not when they're important (like "I'm breaking up with you for your own good" kind of thing). Maybe the problem is that she somehow sees Jay as slightly inferior to either herself or her brother or her father. Maybe it's the inverse, that she feels that she's the inferior one, which is a viewpoint made believable by her quick decision that she and Jay don't have "it."

The sub-plot with Chris and her friends is going to get very hairy, isn't it? Ellie will see Jay with one or more of the girls in a non-teaching situation (probably Chris) and assume that it's a romantic encounter, when actually it's Jay trying to convince Chris to name the person who's waling on her. More failure to communicate coming up!

And now Jay will have to deal with Jon and Kaylie. I'd think that Kaylie would be harder on him that Jon would, but I don't know. Anyway, I'm sure it'll be interesting.

Next chapter coming up soon, right?


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I absolutely, positively loved the description of Lois and Clark when they kissed.
Aw, thanks, Bob. blush

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And I'm just sure that Ellie told Jon, Jon told Kaylie, and now Kaylie will tell Jay
What are siblings for if not to beat some sense into you when you need it?

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I'd think that Kaylie would be harder on him that Jon would, but I don't know.
Most definitely, Terry. Kaylie has no problems yelling at and/or insulting Jay if she thinks he needs it. wink

Thanks for the feedback everyone. The next part will be up at the usual time, whenever that is for people.


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