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Heck of a start, Elisabeth! Some of my favorite lines: “I’ve covered so many murders,” she informed him flatly, “that I wouldn’t think twice about committing one myself.” She threw her purse in the bottom drawer and slugged the dredges of yesterday’s coffee in the azalea behind her. Anyway, I just love that Lois' novel is a NaNo work and that we get to see how Clark's odd behavior affects it! Looking forward to more! JD
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Very nice, Elisabeth. And recruiting more Nano folcs is always a good thing  . Carol
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Elisabeth, this is such wonderful start. Your writing sure is delightful and your Lois wonderfully sassy. And I so love PML. I read this this morning and now I can't find half the quotes I wanted to add. *sigh* I hope those will do  The Daily Planet that greeted her, however, was not the same place that she had left. The place was swarming with unfamiliar faces. She tripped over a power cord that someone had loosely taped across the walkway. The bullpen was a madhouse. The women were dressed like a sleepover at Cat Grant’s with makeup caked on until you could barely see the real face underneath. I don't know why, but this was so vivid. Actually just like the rest of your story. “I need to move this,” some acne-covered kid insisted, grabbing a corner of her desk.
“I’ve covered so many murders,” she informed him flatly, “that I wouldn’t think twice about committing one myself.” Actually, the whole hungover scene. You do a wonderful hungover Lois.  “I was more worried about the stuff on the coffee table,” she blurted out before remembering that she was never going to talk about that degrading affair.
He shrugged and shook his head. “I don’t remember you dancing on the table.”
Dancing? Was that the worst thing that happened? She danced a little bit? She thought back to the state of her attire this morning. While there was a lot of flesh showing, at least the important parts were all covered. Perhaps she hadn’t even danced a complete striptease. *snickers* Author's Footnotes: Yes, yes. By now you've figured me out. This is another of those attempts to recruit fresh blood to write with us. For more info, visit www.nanowrimo.org And if you decide to write L&C fanfic, even better. The entire NaNoWriMo theme was hilarious. You know, if I had the time, I might even try it. I mean, I have a story lined up and everything. Just no time for spending a month writing a novel. Michael
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Being the ever faithful hubby, I know there is even more good writing to come...
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I loved this! It was cute, and your writing is so descriptive. All in all, a very effective commercial for NaNo.
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Originally posted by amberlea:
I loved this! It was cute, and your writing is so descriptive. All in all, a very effective commercial for NaNo.
Amber (who is considering working on a fanfic for NaNo...but who is unsure she has any ideas big enough for 50,000 words) Just remember to give full descriptions of all your main characters, each and every time. for example: He's not just Clark Kent. He's Clark Kent, mild mannered reporter for that great Metropolitian newspaper, The Daily Planet. Partner to Lois Lane. And in reality Superman! The man of Steel. Last son of Krypton. Defender of Truth, Justice and the American Way. see what word padding can do for you... James
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And if all else fails uncontract all contractions. Don't use don't, use do not - at least until December . Carol [who has no personal knowledge whatsoever of what that could do to a word count...]
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How many of you know that we already have a story with this same title on the archive? And that it was a 1998 Kerth nominee? Come on, raise your hands! Well, it doesn't matter. You can't copyright a title to a song or a book or a movie, so I'm certainly not complaining about that, since these two stories bear little or no resemblance to each other. In fact, I'm not complaining about anything. I'd like to read Lois' novel when she's finished with it. Or - maybe this is the story of how she really did finish it! If that's the angle, it's a great one. If not, it's still an excellent look at Lois and her frustrations with Clark and how she deals with them. I'm ready for the next post.
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I thought I remembered something like that but I didn't go look and it's very different from what I remembered - which was the actual novel... ish...
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Thanks for the writing advice.  I'm slowly but surely working up the nerve to start something, so we'll see how it goes... Amber
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Thank you all for the yummy feedback.
I'm trying to write as much as my insane schedule allows. I should have the next part up tomorrow, although with illness running through the family I may be behind if another kid falls sick.
I'm glad you liked that line, JD. I was pretty proud of it myself, although my 6-yr-old DD said, "Why would Lois say that? It makes her sound mean." Go figure!
Carol, I've appreciated your nano-recruiting, as well. (I just finished Lucy's story yesterday. I'm trying to make up for a 2-1/2 month backlog, so please forgive me if I didn't leave feedback repeatedly just this once.)
Michael, I'm glad you like my sassy, hungover Lois. I tried to do a good job, but I've never been hungover myself. Being a 90lb weakling, I tend to get severe headaches long before I've reached to the point where most people get headaches. Since headache-y women are not so much fun at parties, I usually just choose sobriety.
BTW, busy people tend to be the MOST successful at nanowriting because they already know the value of their time. Squeeze in a few minutes multitasking between meals and writing with a few more minutes oozed out before bedtime and you might find yourself a novelist 30 days later.
James, thanks for the support even though I know you're not sure which parts I've posted and which parts are yet to come. You make an excellent sounding board.
Amber, thanks for the feedback. Ignore all of that advice on how to stretch a story. You don't need to stretch your idea. You would be surprised at how many words are needed for what seems like a simple idea.
I found lots of help with my story last year from the simple suggestions they offered to the elementary students. First, find out what the protagonist wants the most. Second, find out what the protagonist is most afraid of. Finally, find out how the antagonist is going to either stand in the way of what the protagonist wants or feeds into what the protagonist fears. Any time you get stuck in your writing you come back to the main theme of desires and fears or the way those desires or blocked or those fears are fed. Yes, it's formulaic but it actually makes for a good story.
If you're still concerned about not having enough words, add an a plot to your b plot or a b plot to an a plot.
Either way you do it, I say go for it. You can't win if you don't try.
Hi, Terry. Thanks for reading. It wouldn't surprise me that there's another story by that same title on the archive, because I stole it word for word from Lois' novel in season three. (BTW, I'm not sure you'll want to read her novel. So far it doesn't sound so good.)
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Elisabeth - believe me I understand backlogs. My Nov. last year was so crazy with DS in the hospital and surgery and everything that I felt not the slightest bit guilty not contracting. This year I might... I'm hoping to get LtL up soon - it's about half done being GE'd so... . Carol
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At the risk of straying off-topic, we didn't have the slightest problem with your uncontracting either. We've all been very proud of you, Carol.
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I tried to do a good job, but I've never been hungover myself. Me, neither. But it is always great to read about  I hope I'll be able to do half as decent a job if and when I get my Lois drunk one day. BTW, busy people tend to be the MOST successful at nanowriting because they already know the value of their time. Squeeze in a few minutes multitasking between meals and writing with a few more minutes oozed out before bedtime and you might find yourself a novelist 30 days later. Temptress I'll make sure to schedule things differently next year, but I just finished writing a 120k word piece and a second one of similar length will be done early November. And since I already did things sort of like you mentioned it for the past few months while writing them, I now need to catch my breath  Michael
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