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So now Chad knows... and very believable reaction on his part... but I can't wait to see how this affects his relationship with Clark...

Hmm. Great revelation. So, what's going to happen next?

I loved that chapter and the revelation. You could tell that the secret was weighing on Lois, and I think Chad's reaction of her hiding something, and then thinking the worse, really brought out the realism of their fight. Well written, and well done. Now, I can't wait to see how Chad and Clark behave when they next talk.

In response to my previous feedback, thanks for your lengthy response. I agree completely that at this stage of their relationship, Lois and Chad need to have less in common. Instead, they should share their values, morals and have a deep-rooted love for each other, which they clearly do. You've written it very well.

You began this Lois and Chad adventure when they were sixteen years old. They were each other's first boyfriend/girlfriend. You had them get over Ellen's confrontation about Lois being a slut, dealing with Chad's grandfather's illness etc. This was their beginning, and I felt that we could have explored their commonalities here. By exploring them at the beginning, I would be confident that they're not still together because they don't know anything else, but because they have a strong, developed relationship that has matured.

Don't get me wrong, I love the new fresh perspective you're taking. It's just, if Lois and Chad do end up staying together, I wish I could see their love story as well.

Anyway enough of my rambling. Thanks for reminding me of the upcoming holiday down there. Can't wait till the next chapter.

Sorry about the short response coming up, Nancy. I read it, and I was relieved that Lois was finally able to tell Chad. I didn't much like his anger, but I was relieved to see that he understood that Lois didn't think that Clark's secret hadn't been hers to share. I loved this:

She bullied it out of him! And Chad smiles, because he knows that it's true!

I have been unhappy in some of your previous stories how Clark has gone to great lengths (to say the least) to keep his secret from Lois, but how he has shared it with others rather readily. So I wasn't very happy that Martha and Jonathan disapproved of Clark for telling Lois, but still Martha wanted him to tell Chad. I know, it is because Martha and Jonathan respect the vows of marriage so much, but still it makes me feel bad and sad that it should be so forbidden for Clark to share his secret with Lois, of all people! And to think I spent twenty years of my life waiting for Clark to tell Lois!

Well, I'm looking forward to how this development will affect the relationship of Lois and Clark and Chad and Clark! (Hopefully, it will not affect the relationship between Lois and Chad.)

Ann

Thank you!

Sara - Next part coming up shortly and we'll see Clark and Chad together.

Lara - See above.

grinch - I see what you're saying - or at least I think I do. You want more of their backstory. Not written yet, but if I ever get through (or start) the next chapter, maybe I'll go back and fill it in.

Ann - I can understand your point about Martha, but the way I see it, she isn't really all that happy about telling Chad either. She's just upset with Clark for not realizing he couldn't tell Lois without telling her husband.

As for not wanting him to tell Lois - remember that she's never met Lois here and given that Clark hadn't told them that he had told her, she may not have heard as much about Lois as you might think. I do see Clark as still close to his parents, but with a long term girlfriend, less close than he was in the show.

Also, from Martha's perspective this may seem a bit weird. Why did Clark tell Lois but not Rachel? We won't "meet" Martha for awhile, but as you might expect, she is very fond of Rachel and I think Rachel has done lots of things to show her love and acceptance for Clark - such as not asking too many questions when he kept insisting they move last minute when traveling around Europe and agreeing to a long distance relationship so he can try out living in Metropolis.

Personally, in the same way I sort of thought Martha was okay with telling Lois in the show long before Clark did, I see Martha as ready to tell Rachel. It's less because she's sure they are meant to be together, since Clark doesn't seem sure of it, as because she's known Rachel for years and Rachel has shown herself to be trustworthy and likely to accept Clark for who he really is. Martha's biggest hope is that Clark finds someone who will do that, so why, when he has someone in his life who has shown signs that she will does he continue to keep it a secret from her, but then go and tell someone who from Martha's perspective is a complete stranger?

She had thought he was being overly cautious, but apparently not if he told Lois.

Or at least, this was my thought as I wrote her reaction.

This was really scary, Nancy. First I was screaming - okay, mind-screaming - at Lois to just blurt it out without telling Chad she had kept things secret. She can apologize for that afterwards. But no, she has to put an elephant into the room first

Things I was expecting during their *talk*.
- Chad believing she's cheating on him.
- Chad believing she's cheating with Clark on him.
- Chad never coming home again due to an unfortunate incident with two tons of American steel.

Scary, Nancy. Really scary. But I don't think, that this part was one that made you evil. I mean, all the angst got wrapped up between start and finish. Which means the hammer is still going to fall, right?

Michael

I think, although it may not have been said, that the first two of your thoughts did go through Chad's mind. I don't think he said them, though, as he didn't really believe Lois would do that. (The last idea clearly isn't going to happen. I have promised that Chad is not dying in this fic.)

I say this because of something that happened to me earlier this year. I got pregnant this spring (a planned thing), but discovered at the first ultrasound appointment that the baby was too small for how far along I was supposed to be. As it happened, this was because the baby had stopped growing, but they can't tell this from one ultrasound.

When the doctor went over the possible causes for the small size of the fetus with my husband and me, he said the most likely was that I hadn't conceived when I thought I had - and told us the date he thought I conceived. Well, I was in Japan on that date (and for several days before and after that) and my husband was not with me. While I knew that I hadn't done anything while in Japan, I did wonder if things progressed smoothly from there, would my husband wonder the whole time I was pregnant until I gave birth to a Caucasian baby?

But my husband brought this up himself later - that his first thought was what would he feel if I ended up giving birth to a Japanese baby. And his problem with it was that he would feel sick since it would confirm for him that somehow I'd been knocked out and raped. The thought that I might have cheated on him never crossed his mind, even knowing that the doctor thought I was half a world away from him when I conceived.

I'd like Lois and Chad to have this kind of marriage as well - where they trust each other that much. But of course, this means Chad gets more than a little upset when he finds out Lois is keeping a secret from him, even if he doesn't really believe she would do something as trust-breaking as cheating on him.

And um... no, I don't recall the chapter where Carol and Kelly started calling me evil, but I don't think we've reached it yet.

That's not really comforting Is there a school somewhere, where one can learn evilness? Or is it a special drug you take? Or a potion, perhaps?

Michael, who is now going to ask Lex and Tempus how they did it.

/back

Well, they told me they first went through their graduate studies at MLT's and then did a special internship in Carol's House of Horrors. So I'm back to the start now. At least until I see the aforementioned chapter. And I promise to fairly compare it to the height of evilness in OTOH.

Well, then, I'm safe. This fic is no where near as evil as OTOH. In my opinion, anyway.