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Decided to try starting my own thread this time around...

Loved it... short and sweet you're right, I never realized it but there were ample incidents for Lois to feel abandoned even before they started dating...

That poor little chocolate yogurt! A victim on the road of love! LOL

You did a wonderful job with Lois, her hurt was very real.

I was really empathizing with the abondoned yogurt. Very well written!

Poor yogurt. Road kill on the narrow highway of Lois Lane's love life.

Very insightful. And using the yogurt as a metaphor for Lois' relationship with Clark while also using it to make the required puddle at the end was outstanding. Nice, tight piece of writing. And you captured Lois' anguish and fear of losing herself in an impossible relationship very well. Wish I could do stuff like this half as well as you have.

Thanks Beth! I feel honored to be the recipient of this year's Frozen Yogurt Award... I mean, of this ficathon entry!

Impressive way to stick so much insight into a cup of melting yogurt. Clark should have know right away that something was wrong. It was chocolate! The denial of chocolate in Lois's book is like a megaphone announcement, lol.

It was nice to see that Lois talked (or ranted) about her feelings instead of keeping Clark in the dark. It got a promise out of him. Shape up, Farm boy! She needs you! And I also like that the argument was kinda off-screen. It allowed you to move them past it, while it still being front and center. I have to admit, I was stumped for prompts and just filled in whatever came to mind first--glad you could make them work!

Once again, thanks. I just finished finals week with the completion of a term paper so this is a welcome way to celebrate.

~Sonia

Very nice Beth,

I was going to comment on your use of the yogurt but Terry already said everything that came to my mind.

I hope that Clark realizes that a revelation needs to follow almost *immediately* or he will face a big problem keeping his word. And, after this scene, he had better not do a “run off” without Lois understanding exactly what’s going on.

Bob

aww! nice work!

and there were several puddles, here, including me in a puddle of goo toward the end.

Thanks everyone! I'm glad you all enjoyed it.

Sonia, your prompt of the puddle was the perfect one for me. It was broad enough for limitless possibilities, but zany enough to force me to be creative. I knew as soon as I saw it that it wasn't going to be an ordinary puddle.

Thanks again everyone for the comments.

Such a beautiful metaphor. I imagine that not showing up with the yogurt would have caused hurt feelings. You depicted that well.


Elisabeth

Aww... I loved the kiss!

Let’s see… A Beth story. Is this going to be a Next Gen treat?

Isn’t she allowed to eat it for some reason?

Sounds suspiciously like a committed relationship to me.

Okay, I may be bad with symbolism, but if the f/y was her feelings, splattering them on the floor mean…?

Thanks Elisabeth, Classicalla, and Michael! I'm glad to know that you enjoyed it.

The way I look at it, it can symbolize the end of Lois feeling abandoned. So the destruction of those particular feelings, and not her emotional health as a whole. Of course, you can also take it as foreshadowing of what's going to happen in the future. If Clark doesn't tell her the truth, it's like he is shoving her feelings to the floor.

And as for Next Gen, Michael... Well, it'll be a while before we see anything from that universe. My current story doesn't have any mention of those characters.

Thanks again for the comments, guys!