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Hi All

Thanks for all your help. A special thanks to Carol M, who pointed a few things out and showed me that details do count. Im really impressed by your care!

FDK is always welcome guys. Thank you!

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Glad I could help! That particular few sentences reads much better now IMO . If there's any other Americanisms or whatever I can help with holler .

I am very much enjoying this. I love how Lois just takes charge and makes them help get Clark there .

More soon please!
Carol

Very moving. I love this paragraph
Lois’ heart crumbled into pieces. To know Clark was in deep distress was one thing, but to see him actually weeping over it was heartbreaking. He was so vulnerable she could barely recognize the strong rational man he had always been since they met. He was her safe port, ,,,,,........ She sipped on her buttermilk cup and bit the fixed sandwich on the table, trying to act as if she hadn’t noticed his emotional breakdown. It was best not to touch the wounds, she thought.

Beautiful! I love the recollections of Clark's growing up days with his dad. Of course that's exactly what he'd be thinking of. You did a terrific job showing Jonathan's quiet wisdom and the way he shaped Clark into the man he is today.

The poem was an interesting choice. Not only is it a wonderful poem and very appropriate for the situation, but it also gives some insight into how Clark became such a well-read man. It wasn't just from his college education and his travels; he got his love of literature from his 'simple' country parents.

And the detail of Lois and Clark falling asleep on the sofas; that's just the sort of suspension of normal daily routines that happens in this kind of crisis. The lack of routines and the lack of sleep just add to the stress, but at the time it can't be helped.

Just lovely.

You know, right now it doesn't feel like Lois is going to be figuring things out on her own, but if/when she learns, she can't even blow up in his face because of the whole family-crisis thingy.

Speaking of which, it feels sort of surreal right now. Poor Clark, there is one thing he can't fix

Michael

Hi All

Thanks for all your feedback and support. I will post the next part shortly and lets see how it goes for them now.

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