Feedback can be short but very insightful. See above.
Elisabeth, thanks for the comment about the various characters. I had originally planned for the other women in the band to be just minor supporting characters, but they wouldn't stay in the background. I'm glad their personalities are coming through clearly.
Michael, nice insight about Clark. He is undercover, after all, and acting "out of character" is part of it. Yes, Lucy has some anger issues, and they're part of the story down the line. I'm glad you caught that.
Female Hawk, glad you like "forward Clark." Again, he's acting because he's undercover, but it is the kind of thing a sailor who's grateful for a job but frustrated by seeing but not being able to touch all the beautiful women around him.
HappyGirl, you're right, Clark can add. But it might take him a little longer than you'd think. Things are going to get interesting soon.
Next part up soon! Thanks to everyone who's reading and/or commenting.
