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Feedback goes here. Any interest? Do we care what happens next?

/squeeeeees happily/

I am so in!

So Lana and Pete know. Lois is trying to land a one on one with the elusive Clark Kent who really is the country boy we all know and love - already with one secret identity of sorts and I'm sure another one to come.

Would love it if Lois meets Smallville!Clark rather than Author!Clark .

So your posting schedule is... every day? Twice a day? More often?

Carol
/whisper/check your email/whisper/

I'm hooked. I loved it. I love alternate beginnings and this one sounds like lots of fun. Very well written and well done. Post the next part soon.

Kathy
www.chili-everyway.com

*SQUEE!* I love it and I wanna see more!

This has real promise. I love Lois's line:

"Well, I'm no Clark Kent...."

So "Clark Kent" is a household name, like Stephen King! And it's interesting that the Famous Author is an act too.

Both Lana and Pete know, obviously.

And what does Famous Author Clark have against Lex Luthor? Is Clark secretly undercover? What dastardly secrets has he unearthed?

And, of course, how will he end up meeting Lois?

*rubs hands in glee*

I can't wait for more posts!

Oh, oh, oh, oh! I can't wait for more! I looked back at the author's name and thought, you've made me a happy girl with this story!! More, ple-e-e-e-ase!

Ha! I love it that Clark is already upstaging Luthor. I can't wait to see the posturing and/or confrontation at the White Orchid Ball. What will Lois' take on it be? Will there still be a power play between Lex and Clark for Lois' attention? And how will Lois react to seeing Clark with Lana?
Hopefully, you'll find out in the next post when undercover Clark bumps into Mad Dog Lane. Right? Right?!

As you can see, I can't wait for the next post.

Yay for feedback!

I was afraid that this one started off a little too slowly, but it seems I've got takers, so /me breathes sigh of relief.

Carol, part 2 is off to the betas, as you know. Thank you Carol and Bob! I'm aiming for twice a week postings, mostly because real life has some storm clouds brewing so I can't completely blow it off like I did last time I started posting a longer story. So, next part probably Thursday.

Kathy, I like alternate beginnings, too. I started this one because I have a particular place I want to go and I don't think it's possible to get there from where the show begins, so I needed to change some of the starting parameters, as it were. It gives us more room to play around.

Queenie and Cookiesmom, your enthusiasm is encouraging. More is on the way.

Ilionthe, I was glad to see that you picked up on Lois's Clark Kent line. It's the first deviation from the pilot, and it's a pretty subtle one, so I was afraid that people would be skimming along and miss it.

BJ, I was intrigued that you found Lois so much softer than we expect from S1. Actually, most of her dialog in that first scene is straight from the pilot script. The Clark Kent line is the only one I added. When I go back and watch the pilot, one of the things that strikes me is the affection between Lois and Jimmy. It seems to me that they had a bit of a big sister/ little brother dynamic going on before Clark showed up. I don't doubt that Lois was Mad Dog Lane when we first met her, but she had a soft side as well. I think she was extra prickly with Clark because he threatened her, both professionally and because of her past with Claude. This Lois doesn't have a partner/competitor at work. She's still the undisputed queen of the newsroom, so she can afford to be a little more magnanimous.

As for Clark and Luthor, I hadn't thought precisely in terms of upstaging, but you're exactly right. Clark hasn't been in Metropolis before now, but I'm sure that's exactly how Luthor would see it--Clark coming into Luthor's town and stealing his limelight.

I'm also tickled by the various speculations about Clark being undercover. That's pretty much the theme of this story, as you can tell from the title. Which Clark Kent is the real one and which are the covers? I'm not sure Clark himself knows that at this point.

Stay tuned!

Fascinating idea HappyGirl!

I didn't used to think that I was into alt-beginnings/alt-universes, but 'Awaken My Heart' has definitely made me more open-minded and I'm going to get to enjoy some amazing fics as a result!

I will definitely be reading on. I love that Clark has taken a different career path (though who knows yet what he actually believes his career to be!) and he is more of a celebrity than Lois, much more, but he is still the Clark we know and love it seems.

Lois will be in awe of his Clark Kent personna when she meets him, though I'm pretty sure he'll be a little in awe of her too!! It appears a special someone is missing from his seemingly-perfect life.

You've created loads of questions at an early stage, which is a sign of a great idea with lots of possibilites. Can't wait to see where it goes. Will Superman or an equivalent be created? He's certainly taken a different approach. It seems similar intentions are there though he appears to have particular goals on quite a grand scale.

Just a first impression, this Clark seems a little less naive than canon-Clark. Although canon-Clark had travelled the world and was, in that sense, wordly-wise, there was a lot to begin with he had no real experience of, and city life and the cynicism that comes with it, was very new to him.

I love that there is still very much a secret identity or identities, even if the main secret (other than the obvious) is that he is a really a straightforward, kindhearted country boy, who hates all the grandeur.

In this story, it seems that Clark's everyday personna, the one most people see, is the cover. It is so interesting! I wonder how different his public Clark Kent personality is, it seems he's polite and well-liked.

So he still wears glasses all the time then, but different ones - he doesn't even like the glasses he has to wear for his public image! And the hairstyle he has to have sounds interesting.

I was pleased to see Lana was married!! It's nice that there are people in on the secret he can confide in, but I'm glad she's not a potential love-interest, at least I hope not!

Hmm, I wonder what Clark knows of Lex to make him dislke him at this stage...?

Great start, I love it, more soon!

Em

Well, I'm intrigued.

I, too, like alt-beginnings, and I like stories where Clark is already successful before he meets Lois, so this one looks like it will hit all the right buttons for me. And I'm definitely smirking over the idea of Clark being just as famous (if not quite as rich) as Lex Luthor -- *and* that he's secretly investigating him. This Clark definitely has a lot going for him ... I just wonder what Lois will think when she meets him. Will she be star-struck like when she first met Lex in the pilot? Or will she meet "farmboy Clark" first and not realize who he is?

I can't wait to find out.

(Oh, and put me down for daily posts being just fine. )

Very interesting...

I'm hooked!

More soon!

Amber

More feedback! Yay!

Em--I'm glad you're giving a new genre a chance. There are so many possibilities and it's fun to play around with them. Yes, this Clark is definitely more worldly-wise. And yes, his life is certainly only perfect on the outside. And, of course he's missing Lois. He just doesn't know it yet. This Clark needed an inner circle who could be part of his jet-set life, and I intentionally put Pete in there to diffuse any misguided speculation about a Clark/Lana match-up. Not gonna happen. As for the multiple identity issues--read on. Same with what Clark has against Luthor, and for Lois's reaction to the charming and popular Mr. Kent. Glad to see you're along for the ride.

Hi Happy!
Sorry that I’m a bit late to the party. But I figured, less waiting between parts that way

Huh?

That bit is just one eyebrow-raiser after another. And my cheeks hurt

At least, on these boards, we don’t have to come up with the hero’s name

Interesting. He sure takes story-preparation to the next level.







Wonder if he’s going to go for a stroll and meet a certain female reporter and get shot down as Hack from Nowheresville only to meet her again in the evening

Okay, I’m hooked. And strongly thinking about reading part 2 right now.

Michael

Bumping the feedback thread to go with the story repost.

Instead of sleeping this evening I spent the night reading all the parts of this story (so far). I can't wait to read the end! I hope we don't have to wait too long!

Looking forward to the conclusion.

Michael

Yeah, this is back!

I'm sorry about your brother. Thank you for coming back to this.