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Lynn

Thank you for writing the epilogue.
It's just as fabulous as the rest of the story.

Clark and Mayson's conversation is excellent. Your characterizations are superb.

Tricia

<happy, waffy sigh> This was wonderful, Lynn. I wasn't really fussed either way if you tied up those loose ends. I kind of liked the way you left it with the promise of what was to come. But I certainly won't object to this!

This was beautifully poignant - you made me feel sorry for Mayson all over again with that awkward, embarrassing scene between them. And then there was waffy in the final scene. Superb!

Thank you. This was a wonderfully enjoyable addition to my morning trawl through the boards.

Just one small thing:


I might have missed something along the way - apologies if so - but this confused me a little. I didn't understand what he was doing here. Since he'd had to use the jeep to drive Mayson back to Metropolis anyway, why didn't he just drive it back again to the cabin as Clark? Why leave it there and fly back as Superman?

LabRat

This was beautiful! Thank you for posting this. I was perfectly happy with the story as you wrote it, so this epilogue is the icing on the cake!!

Labrat asks why Clark flew back. Now that I think about it, when I was reading Part 3 I remember I wondered the same thing. The jeep belongs to Lois. Taking it without her permission in order to drive Mayson back is pretty presumptuous. Allowing Mayson to drive back alone (which I know he didn't do, but it's what Lois thinks he did), would be unforgiveably audacious! If I were Lois (who is already in a bad mood), my reaction to that would have been, well, let's just say it's a good thing Clark is really Superman!

Of course, if Clark *had* driven back, then we wouldn't have them stranded there. Unless, of course, a convenient blizzard should just happen to strike...

- Vicki

Ohhh, is he going to fly both to Metropolis?

Jose

Mayson took it well, I am very sorry for her. Yet, I am a little surprised that she didn't ask if "the right woman" is Lois.

This is an enchanting story and well written, too. Only I find it hard to believe that Clark is such a lunkhead that he can really believe that he could make love to another woman when Lois is so near.

What a lovely surprise and a great way to start my day!

Nice scene with Mayson..sooo awkward, I was sad for her Clark just tried to be the nice guy but he really messed this up in my opinion.

Then we had Lois' deductive reasoning 101..lol, very funny...
We know what you mean girlfriend!!

Nice way to wrap it up..altho I wouldn't be adverse to a Part 2! hint, hint.

~Liz

Just read Part 3 and the epilogue and both were absolutely wonderful. You manged to write poignantly and wittily at the same time. I chuckled :p and cried Poor Mayson.

Lucky Lois and Clark. I would have been happy with Part 3, but thank you for the epilogue.

gerry

Hey everyone -

All right, LabRat. You caught me!!

I admit that my primary reason for having Clark drive Mayson home but leaving the Jeep in Metropolis was a plot device - I needed to get Lois and Clark alone in that cabin without any means of leaving. Also, I didn't want him to admit that he drove Mayson home because I wanted to build the tension about whether or not he slept with Mayson, and admitting to Lois that he drove Mayson home would cue her that something bad must have happened. And if Clark admitted to Lois that he drove Mayson home, he would have had to drive back, (unless he told her that Superman gave him a lift, but why bother) taking away the stranded-at-the-cabin thing.

But in defense of my justification in doing this, I used the following assumptions about Clark
1. That he is too nice of a guy to let Mayson drive home alone
2. That he is too practical of a guy to drive back to the cabin (2 hour drive) when he assumes that Dan will be arriving at some point to take Lois home
3. That Clark would worry about Lois until he knew that Dan had arrived, so he might be motivated to take a quick flight up to check on her.

As for the very reasonble objections about Clark letting Mayson drive off in Lois's Jeep (which is very presumptious on his part!), it's another reason I had him drive her home. He's driven the Jeep before so it seemed a little more plausible that he'd help himself if the situation warranted it.

So all of this stuff aside, it is very clear that I need to work on explaining this stuff a bit better in the story. I may add a paragraph in the Epilogue that speaks to his thoughts/actions that will hopefully satisfy the very valid points raised by all of you perceptive readers! At least well enough so that you can't drive a truck through the hole (maybe only a little motor scooter of suspended disbelief!)

Thanks all for reading and offering your good points.

Lynn

Hey Lynn,

Excellent story!!!!!! I've loved every word that you have written. Thank you for such a wonderful story, and the epilogue, also excellent, was written so quickly!!! I'm in awe!

Another possible solution to your car dilemma -- could it be possible to have had them take Mayson's car up there? Clark could then assume that Dan would drive them back. Clark could still drive her home and fly back to the cabin.

That would also solve the ethics of having Clark let Mayson use Lois' Jeep.

More soon!!

Missy (who is hoping for that additional little scene in the other forum )

Oh, Lynn, thank you! And WOW!! This is just what I was looking for.

The scene with Mayson and Clark is so perfectly embarrassing. Poor Clark! And, of course, he had to be honest when Mayson asked if she was the right person, and if she would have been the right person had someone else not been in the way. Just great!

And Lois had the courage to tell Clark how she felt. Yay for Lois! And again, I could just picture her saying it. Wonderful!!

As far as Clark's explanation for leaving the Jeep goes, I think the way Vicki (was it Vicki?) put it works for me - he just needed some space and fresh air and the liberation of flying after having been cooped up awkwardly with Mayson for a couple of hours. As for explaining it to Lois - well, of course Clark could easily have flown back to Metropolis and picked up the Jeep at any time during the day and Lois would never have known, so we might ask why he told her it was missing.

So how about Lois noticing it was missing? You'd have to make a minor change to Part 3 for that, but if she notices it's missing then that blows his plan to fly back to Metropolis and pick it up (he might have been planning to fly above cloud cover with the Jeep, so it wouldn't have taken him two hours to bring it back. But if Lois notices, maybe he has no option but to tell her that Mayson took it (and pretend that he didn't go with her).

Anyway, I have really, really enjoyed this story, and - like Save Me, Superman - it's going straight to my Kerth list. Can't wait for your next story!


Wendy

I believe that was CC. (Just giving credit where credit's due.) BTW, it works for me, too!

- Vicki

Ok I am satisfied now<g> That was much better for me. Very nice in fact. OK there is still the Superman thing between them. My Question is will Clark do it first and then tell her he is Superman. Will he give her a choice, like he usually does? Or will he tell her after the deed. Ah The Deed? will that be something you write for the nfanfic section? Anyway It is much better with the wrap up. I hope you write more soon. Laura

LOL, Lynn. Yeah, I figured that was the author's reason for doing it. As for what Clark's was, I like any of the explanations given here and there on this thread and the others. I like CC's a lot too! They all make sense.

Don't think it would take much to pin down though - along the lines you outline in your post, couple of paras of introspection, works for me!!

LabRat

Hi,

Great part.

Lynn,

I'm speechless! This story was a masterpiece. Beautiful!

Write more. And know that someone out there gets very happy when seeing stories that mention 'lynnm' as the poster.
AnnaBtG.

Ok, I haven’t posted on the boards for ages, I’ve kind of fell back into lurkdom but I’m still always reading the boards and fanfic and just had to comment on this story, because it was fabulous!
The setting was perfect and the passion and tension and pure waffyness of the whole thing was really beautiful. I loved it! Can’t wait for the possible sequel with the whole revelation and a great nfic scene!

Thankyou for such a wonderful Lois and Clark love story.

Sarah-Jayne