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Any comments? I know I have lots to learn abour fic writing.

Thanks

Em

I think you did a good job of describing Lois's desolation and heartbreak. Clark running out at such an intimate moment, not telling her he's Superman, is of course the stuff of Great Angst. Can their relationship survive? Not without some communication!

I look forward to seeing how you get our favorite couple out of their mess.

Well, it looks like we're in for an angsty ride. I knew it was a long shot to have him share his secret here, but I was hoping for it anyway.

It's really too bad that Lois couldn't focus on the scared angle. That might have meant they had a chance of working things out a little quicker.
Ouch! It's very Lois to steamroller over Clark, not letting him get a word in edgewise. Clark's thoughts (his admission to all the things he'd done wrong, the acknowledgement that Lois was not going to handle it well, his suspicion that her calm facade was not real or right) had me hoping that he'd force her to listen to him, but I don't think even Clark could withstand her dismissive words. Again - ouch.

BJ

Em, you're doing a great job!

Lois's reaction was, of course, completely understandable. What else is she supposed to think?

Clark was a little braver than he sometimes is, beging so determined to talk to Lois after she was obviously trying to avoid him.

When he was thinking about telling her at the first opportunity, I was thinking "Don't wait for an opportunity, Clark! Make one!" And that's exactly what he tried to do.

Her 'the best defense is a good offense' strategy is also typical Lois Lane, which Clark realizes might be the case. I hope he's determined enough to work his way past her defenses.

As I've been saying all along, there's no possible way for Lois to understand what's going on until she knows about Superman. And, even though her words have hurt Clark, it's still his responsibility to tell her the truth. Otherwise she's left with the only possible conclusion; that Clark doesn't care. He's got to be brave enough to push past the thorny hedge and make her listen, even if she doesn't want to. It's not a matter of respecting her reluctance and letting it go because she wants him to, because she doesn't have all the facts and he's the only one who does. He owes her the truth.

Oh, I just found this, and I'm glad I did. I like it.

What HappyGirl said. Let's hope he is tenatious, and doesn't give up until he has told Lois the truth.

Next part, please!

Hi everyone, thank you so much for taking the time to leave FDK!!

Iolanthe

I'm pleased you're liking (as much as you can) the angst. You know I will get them out of it! I appreciate your comments about how Lois was feeling. I was worried that bit went on too long. I played around with it quite a bit and still wasn't completely happy - I am now!

BJ

I know they're both being pretty frustrating at the moment, but I'm pleased you can see why. Clark was quite persistent, for Clark, but I know not persistent enough! There's a pretty major detail he really needs to share.

I'm afraid Lois went for the worst-case scenario. It was a pretty horrible position to be in though.

HappyGirl

Thank you so much for your encouragement. I'm glad you understood Lois and that you thought Clark was brave (or braver than he often is when it comes to being completely honest with Lois). I was trying to show that he did try at least to speak first!

Vicki

So pleased you've given my story a try! Clark, tenacious?! - We'll see. I will try my best to post soon.

Thank you all.

Em