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Thanks to everyone for their help with information about healing crystals and the Declaration of Independence. This was my first attempt at writing Star (I think) and it was a challenge. You guys and gals helped a lot. It was amusing, however, seeing how many people thought that the advice on crystals was related to Clark.

ML

Absolutely loved it! But I've got to go to work, so maybe I'll post more later.

Great part with Star. She is always so upbeat and fun.
I loved the scene with Perry and the fish.

Great part all around.

Now since the Olympics starts this week I am hoping the posting schedule will accelerate. We would not want you to take any chances and miss any curling.

We are just thinking of you.

Kathy
www.chili-everyway.com

so how many parts is this gonna go? the angst is getting to me!
love star!

You wrote a great Star - very believable!

Lois won't take off the engagement ring, right?

Wonder what will happen when Lois finds those more recent diaries and if she'll wonder whether it's fake or something (or if she really wrote it)?

Can we get part 9 early? Pretty please? Maybe as an early present for Valentine's day, maybe?

Hmm… Nope, not buying it. I am willing to buy that Lois is too messed up to consider it, though

I’d have to go check but did you hint at amnesia? Actually, doesn’t matter because what FoLC would remember Lois having amnesia? That’s something blocked out of the populous’ collective memory to keep us sane And then you come and twist it and fix it and make this sordid affair into a beautiful Valentine’s story

Your Lois-thinking-last-night-through scene felt really weird. Um, no that’s not right. It’s not weird-weird, it’s Lois trying to think what she ‘knows’ she’s supposed to think while neither her heart nor her body were into it. And this makes Lois feel wrong to me. Which of course is exactly what you want to accomplish here

PS: Are you using a story-structure approach or winging it? Just asking because with a 15-part story last night was the big midpoint twist and all. And of course, Operation Fool Kent the failed attempt during the response-part.

Edit:
PPS: The thread from FFR on crystal healing

I remember the crystals questions! You were implying Clark! And therefore an ASU rewrite - you sneaky author you!

I read this on the treadmill this morning and have very little recollection what I was going to say . And kids with Valentine's demanding attention...

I did love Star though! And the fish convo .

You've got a good point. Maybe I shouldn't post when the olympics are on. After all, you will all have better things to do than read stories.

Sorry about that. I suppose I could wrap it up quickly. Okay so... Star fails. Five years later, Lois, still in love with Deter, finally convinces Clark that he's failed and he takes her back to Metropolis. She runs off with the only man she loves and Clark goes back to Kansas to take a job at the Smallville Post. The end.

Did that help?

Okay - so someone else said Clark and you didn't correct them.

I call that implication by omission .

And just for that you should give us part 9... .

Nope, some of us aren't really winter sports fans, and since everything else goes on hold for the Olympics, we have NOTHING to do. So that means we need at least one chapter a night until the story is over.

OK, I do watch the skating . . .

Great job! Love the sexual tension between them! Star is a nice addition and Perry's way of finding out if she is ok was great. More soon. laura

Yay! She knows something is off. And her mind won't stop worrying about that little inconsistency. Once she starts thinking about it, it'll tantalize her and taunt her until she lets the sunshine in.

This was great!



Uh-oh! What's going to happen first - Lois regaining her memory or Lois finding out the secret? Or simultaneously?

Yes, that is a very depressing thought.

Ah, rosemary for remembrance!

Outstanding chapter! Delightful Star!





Ann

Michael, I've been thinking about this statement and I disagree with you on this. Lois doesn't feel guilty about betraying Max because she didn't betray Max. Lois didn't betray anyone. She made love to her financee - and even though her head may not know this, her heart does.

Guilt is not a product of the head. It's a product of the heart. If you have ever done something wrong and then tried to convince yourself that you weren't in the wrong, you'll know this because you will still feel guilty.

So there is nothing wrong with Lois' moral compus. Her heart made love to the man she loved. She didn't sell her body. She's not being casual about sex. Her heart is just fine. Her heart knows she made love to her soulmate.

It's only her head that is having problems. But because her heart doesn't have a problem, she feels no guilt in relation to Max. Now, she does feel guilt in relation to Clark - because her heart knows that she hurt him.

Hope that clarifies things for you. I think you're looking at this story as if Lois really does love Max. She doesn't. She just has words with no feelings behind it running through her mind that prevent her from admitting to her conscious self what her feelings are for either Max or Clark.

ML

I also think you did a great job with Star's voice. Her babbling and flashes of psychic insight on the show were always amusing to me and you didn't disappoint here.

It's interesting to see that Lois apparently feels a familiarity with Star. She doesn't know why, but she's comfortable letting Star putter around in her kitchen. As far as I can remember, there was at least one scene of Lois and Star eating ice cream together (the aluminum foil helmet episode, yeah?), so the idea that they got together to chat over tea seems completely plausible. I'm glad that you brought her into the story.

So, if Lois senses a familiarity with Star, but no one else (Clark, Perry, Jimmy, her parents, Superman), then what's the difference? Is it because Star's female? Or is it because Deter didn't know about her and didn't have a chance to prejudice Lois' mind against Star?

Loved, *loved* the discussion between Perry and Superman about Lois' fish. And Star's response to Lois and Clark's night together and the heat between them was very entertaining.

More soon?
BJ

Hmm, I guess I should have substituted 'feeling' with 'knowing'. You're right, of course, that Lois in her heart isn't cheating on Max. But at the same time, she 'knows' she's in love with Max and she knows the social norms for behaving towards other people when you're in a 'relationship'. True, Lois and Max aren't dating yet but since she's thinking of Max as her only love, shouldn't this make her pause really hard because she's emotionally very inclined to sex with Clark while she 'knows' she's in love with Max. And no matter the feelings, social norms tell Lois that she's doing wrong by herself and by max when she's sleeping with Clark and enjoying it. So, she's basically ignoring the fabric of our society and the intellectual reaction to this would be knowing to feel guilt. Since she's subconsciously not doing any of these 'bad' things, she's not 'feeling' guilt and this dichotomy is the big black hole that makes Lois feel wrong, like she's been programmed, and not very carefully to resemble a decent human being. The surprising part is, that Lois is also ignoring these aspects of her personality and now I'm going in circles.

No idea if this makes better sense. Given how messed up Lois is because of the brainwashing, it's not really surprising and makes my head hurt almost as much as time travel conundrums.

Michael

I completely agree with ML, Michael, but I think I see what you mean. Lois thinks that she is in love with Deter - it's a mantra she keeps repeating - but in spite of that she has made love to CLark. Her heart knows that this was alright, because she and Clark are engaged and love each other very much, but her head really ought to think that this lovemaking was wrong. Lois isn't troubled, however, because she is listening to her heart rather than to her confused mind.

I think Michael's concern is precisely that Lois doesn't seem to be troubled by her apparent unfaithfulness. Lois's conscious mind should know, in spite of her amnesia, that it is considered very wrong to have sex with one man if you have publicly professed your love for another. Lois keeps declaring her love for Deter, yet she had sex with Clark, and therefore she should be troubled by her apparent unfaithfulness. And the fact that she isn't feeling troubled about it should give her pause. Why isn't she feeling guilty? We know of course that the real reason is that she doesn't love Deter at all, but shouldn't Lois herself be wondering about her strange reaction? Then again, Lois has been utterly uninterested in examining her own motives and her own reasons for doing anything. She just keeps repeating that she loves only Max! Sigh!

Well, there have been little signs that the old Lois Lane curiosity is returning. I'm impatiently looking forward to seeing more of Lois's old self!

Ann

That's it exactly, Ann! Thanks for taking my jumbled thoughts and making them presentable

Michael

Michael, would it help if I let you know that she does deal with this issue later?

Until then, I think it's sort of like someone with leprosy who stubs their toe. They don't feel it so their mind doesn't immediately register that it's something that they have to deal with. Same here. Guilt is a god-given gift to prod us when we do something wrong. Lois has no guilt over cheating on Max, so until she directs her mind to that question, there is nothing to prod her in that direction. And there are only so many things that any of us can think about at one time.

Now, in the not too distant future, Lois will direct her mind to the question - and you will see the consequences of it. But at the moment, she is dealing with a lot of other issues. And since her heart isn't telling her that she did something wrong in regards to Max, she isn't addressing it. But don't worry. She will.


ML

/understanding lights up/

Now, for the second part of your reply...
I want this to mean you will post part 9 any minute now but since it's late over here and I'm probably already fast asleep by the time you post, it's probably a moot point