Very good take on TOGOM. I like your suggestion that it was a lack of courage that prevented Superman from going back Lois as Clark Kent and from being the hero that he needed to be:
He was living in an icy fortress, in the middle of nowhere. A cold, heartless place, the very opposite of Clark’s warm personality. And he was hiding. From himself, from Lois, from his parents, and the people of Metropolis who needed him. Had Superman become a coward?
And I love that you used my previous post and actually built Superman a Fortress in the Arctic! As a child I was slightly horrified that Superman would be spending time in a place like that.
I like the setup of the story. I like the mixture of a comic book world, an LnC world and reality. I like the mixture of time periods, the 1930s, the 1990s and today.
Go easy on Abbey, though. Don't give her a bigger role than she deserves. Remember that LnC doesn't usually give Lois and Clark a "deus ex machina", an intervening outer force that solves their problems for them. Let them handle their problems as much as they can on their own, and respect their characters. I thought that this was out of character for Lois:
Lois looked up, momentarily forgetting who the girl was, but the bagel reminded her. She liked this girl for some reason, so she decided to give her a break.
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“So, what would you like to ask me?” Lois asked, spreading her hands out in a gesture of openness.
I don't think Lois would be so accomodating to a young girl she has never seen before.
And here Abbey wants to solve Lois's problem for Lois:
<<Hold it together, Miss Lane. I’ll find him for you.>>
This isn't what LnC is usually about, and I'd much prefer it if Lois gets to find Clark on her own, or if Clark decides to come back to her on his own.
Abbey may still be a catalyst, but I hope she will be more of an observer than an agent in the rest of the story.
But this story has a lot of potential, so I'm looking forward to more!
Ann
Bet you didn't think I'd take the TOGOM angle, did ya?
